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Hi, here's one by me and John, thanks for tuning in.
Thanks for the fun John.

please listen... http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Sweethearts Gone
© John Voorpostel/C. Stewart ( 2016 )

Someone's sweethearts gone
Someone's sweethearts gone

Well did you see the movie were the heroine died
In the arms of her lover, everyone cried
There were tears in the alleys
Tears in the valleys
Someones sweethearts gone

And all the names carved deep, on the monument wall
Remebering those who fought for it all
There were tears in the alleys
Tears in the valleys
Someones sweetheart is gone

Like silhouettes that we see, somewhere in the mist
Not quite in focus, but there nonetheless
Almost like a religion. almost like a religion

And now the movie’s a reality the heroes are gone
The lights were turned off and and the curtain was drawn
There were tears in the alleys
Tears in the valleys
Someone's sweethearts gone

Like silhouettes that we see, somewhere in the mist
Not quite in focus, but there nonetheless
Almost like a religion. almost like a religion

Someone's sweethearts gone
Someone's sweethearts gone

Well thank you for taking this and running with it Cal. It was a nice surprise to come here this morning to find out you turned the lyric into a song.There's stuff I write that never makes it to music as I lose time and focus etc., and this one never had a note until you brought it to life.

Quite nicely I will add. You re wrote the lyric so it fits the music well. I especially liked how you modulated down into "like silhouettes that we see..."

Hi John and Calvin,

Wow! I really enjoyed this.

A lyric that goes from the concrete like the heroine dying, to the slightly allusive "monument wall" (The Vietnam Vets Wall within the Washington Monument?) verse, and the more abstract silhouettes that are "almost like a religion" which is my favorite stanza.

Calvin, you deliver this with a cool deliberate-ness, and your guitar playing is spot on and very pretty, and there's subtle harmonies in there that I really appreciate, too.

Great work, guys!
Mike

Hi John,

I appreciate you letting me tinker with this tune, thank you.

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Hello Mike,

Thanks for dropping to listen and for the nice comments.
We appreciate it.

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Hey John and Calvin,

Stirring lyrics here and classic moody Calvinization to bring them to life. Especially liked the "tears in the alleys/tears in the valleys lines"....

Great combo you two.

Cheers,
Beth

Calvin.
Your arrangements are always interesting and I always wait for the last note.
You take a sad song and somehow turn it on it's head.
"Someone's sweethearts gone ..... oh ohh"
It shouts "PUT ME IN A QUENTIN TARANTINO FILM"

Vic

Hi Beth,

Thank you for the kind words, we appreciate it !
Have a nice day.

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Hi Calvin,

Out of all your songs listed this is the first I've listened to. What a great way to tell this story--almost in a haunting fashion. For anyone who has seen the Vietnam wall for example--if you think of that vision while listening to this song--it's pretty moving to say the least. Great job,
Roger.

A beautiful collab guys.
An excellent write John full of emotion and Calvin you capture it wonderfully.
I was just thinking that I wanted to hear a musical break when... bamm, the little guitar breaks kicked in.

Nicely done.

Hi Roger,

Good to see you, hope you're doing well.
THANKS, we appreciate you listening.

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Calvin and John--

A fine treatment both grinding and abstract--great job you all!

Mackie

Well this one has gotten some attention

Thanks for your kind words Michael, Beth, Vic, Roger, Nelson and Mackie...and to all who looked in to see what Cal was up to with my lyric.

FYI, this is what Cal started with...you can see the changes he made that transitioned it into a song


Did you see the movie were the heroine died
In the arms of her lover, everybody cried
There were tears in the alleys, everyone was unhappy
America’s sweetheart in stone
America’s sweetheart is gone


There’s a name on the wall in the park by the mall
In remembrance of those who have fought and have fallen
There were tears in the alleys, everyone was unhappy
American heart ache in stone
American heart ache in stone


Like silhouettes in the mist
Not quite in focus, but the past nonetheless
And almost a religion
Almost a religion


The movie’s now reality and the heroes are gone
Not quite sure what for but then the truth has been withdrawn
There are tears in the alleys, everyone is unhappy
American heart ache in stone
American heart ache in stone

Poignant lyric and topic but it works very well, like the guitar too, really good pro job C and J
Trvis

Hello Mister Nelson,


We appreciate you taking the time to listen & comment.
THANK YOU.


Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Hi ya Mackie,


We thank ya !
Have a good evening.


Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Hello Travis,


Thanks a bunch we're glad you dropped in !

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Calvin & John, There's an interesting guitar hook in this song. Reminds me a little of the Rolling Stones. I'd like to hear what it would sound like with a full band treatment. Another nice collaboration between the two of you.

Hello Dan,



Thanks a bunch, it was a fun project.

Have a good weekend.


Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

this one turned out really well!A sad story with a sad feel,you can't go wrong with that.Nice co-write you two!Mike

Hi Mike,

Thanks, John did a good job !
I appreciate him letting me fool with it.

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Hey Calvin,

Very cool, especially neat lyrics. I kind of get a feeling that the "nonetheless" rhyme could be improved. Not so much that it's "not a strong rhyme," rather, an opportunity to say more there as an analogy etc.

Great job Calvin!

steady-eddie.

Hello Eddie,

Good to see you.
Hope you're doing well.
We appreciate you taking the time to listen---THANKS !


Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

VERY cool! Agree with Vic on the Tarantino comment.
That guitar gives it a great atmosphere.

Scott

Hello Scott,


We sure appreciate you listening, THANKS.


Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Calvin and John, good joint effort. I especially liked this:

Like silhouettes that we see, somewhere in the mist
Not quite in focus, but there nonetheless
Almost like a religion. almost like a religion

Ricki

Hello Ricki,


Thanks a bunch, we appreciate you taking time to listen & comment.

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart