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#1121661 - 12/30/16 12:39 AM Raven Flies  
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Good evening JPFers! I first posted my g/v of this song about 2 years ago. With the help of some insightful critiques, I re-wrote it until I was happy with it. I'd love your thoughts on it now that it's all grown up! But, just so you know, it's done now and I don't foresee re-doing it. I just wanted to share. Thanks for listening. Again.

P.S. Definitely NOT me singing!

https://soundcloud.com/rickib/raven-flies

RAVEN FLIES

Tattoo on a pearl grey sky
Raven flies, I hear his cry
Tidings of a sad goodbye

What becomes of an angry man
With a gun clenched in his hand
His made up mind won’t understand

He rode to save my honor
Someone else got in the way
Now he’ll live with it forever
And they’ll hunt him down till his dying day

Please don’t leave me here, I begged
We can take the riverbed
He slipped away alone instead

The real villain never pays
Hearts are broken everyday
Sometimes a woman has no say

He rode to save my honor
Someone else got in the way
Now he’ll live with it forever
And they’ll hunt him down till his dying day

Soaring high above his tracks
Feathers purple, green and black
Raven says my man’s never coming back

He rode to save my honor
Someone else got in the way
Now he’ll live with it forever
And they’ll hunt him down till his dying day

Tattoo on a pearl grey sky
Raven flies, I hear his cry


©Ricki E. Bellos (BMI)



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#1121664 - 12/30/16 08:27 AM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Ricki E. Bellos]  
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Hi Ricki,


W O W, I'm impressed.
Cool music and your vocals soar like the raven.


Calvin


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#1121670 - 12/30/16 12:29 PM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Ricki E. Bellos]  
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Always enjoy your stuff Ricki. smile

#1121671 - 12/30/16 01:23 PM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Calvin]  
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Thanks Calvin but I only sing like this in my dreams. That would be Kris Bradley.

Ricki

#1121672 - 12/30/16 01:23 PM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Martin Lide]  
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Thanks for checking it out, Martin.

Ricki

#1121677 - 12/30/16 02:47 PM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Ricki E. Bellos]  
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Awesome Ricki!You should be proud of this one,excellent job from everyone.Mike

#1121680 - 12/30/16 03:10 PM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Ricki E. Bellos]  
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Hey Ricki, a little different sound from you.

It's a good one.

Vic


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#1121682 - 12/30/16 03:20 PM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Michael LeBlanc]  
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Thanks, Mike, glad you liked it. They are all excellent artists.

Ricki

#1121683 - 12/30/16 03:22 PM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Vicarn]  
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Thanks Vic, the big difference being the country flavor. You did notice the line where I say it isn't me singing, right? smile

Ricki

#1121718 - 12/31/16 03:07 AM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Ricki E. Bellos]  
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I listened to this a couple of times because I like it!! Great vocal on this, the music tells the story and moves and is catchy, I was totally into this, what a great song all around!!

Tammy


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#1121732 - 12/31/16 01:48 PM Re: Raven Flies [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Thanks for listening, Tammy, and twice at that! smile

Ricki

#1121739 - 12/31/16 04:31 PM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Ricki E. Bellos]  
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Hi Ricki:

Very nice... and Kris really "tore it up" on the vocal. Great story with enough left for the listener to use his/her imagination. Enjoyed very much. ----Dave

#1121748 - 12/31/16 05:14 PM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Ricki E. Bellos]  
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Excellent work, Ricki. I like your voice, too.

#1121752 - 12/31/16 05:27 PM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Dave Rice]  
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Thanks for listening Dave. Kris really made it her own.

Ricki

#1121753 - 12/31/16 05:28 PM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Jim Colyer]  
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Thanks Jim, and I assume you meant the writing? That is not my vocal.

Ricki

#1121796 - 01/02/17 11:57 AM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Ricki E. Bellos]  
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You picked a good vocalist for this one. Great music, too, got that classic sound. Emmy Lou would have done this one in her hey day. Sounds mighty fine to me. Cool story too.


"It's supposed to be hard. If it wasn't hard, everyone would do it. The 'hard' is what makes it great."
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#1121806 - 01/02/17 02:52 PM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Kevin Emmrich]  
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Thanks for giving this a listen, Kevin. Glad you liked it.

Ricki

#1121837 - 01/03/17 12:54 AM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Ricki E. Bellos]  
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Ricki,

Glad you shared--loved it!

steady-eddie.

#1121893 - 01/03/17 08:29 PM Re: Raven Flies [Re: E Swartz]  
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Thanks Eddie.

Ricki

#1121937 - 01/04/17 09:07 PM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Ricki E. Bellos]  
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Hi Ricki,

This is a really well produced demo. I love the steel guitar work and the muted guitar in the right channel.

This would have worked very well in episode 9 or 10 of "Westworld" --it kind of describes Dolores' plight.

Very well written story and the vocals are earnest mostly but sassy when they need to be.

Great work!


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#1121949 - 01/05/17 12:05 PM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Ricki E. Bellos]  
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Great finished product Ricki!
You should be proud of what you've done here.
It sounds very professional and I like the way the lyrics progress throughout the song. smile
Great job!!!
Paul

#1121984 - 01/05/17 09:11 PM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Ricki E. Bellos]  
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Great song! Great performance. Excellent!

John

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Thanks Mike, I think Kris really brought her A game. And I hope to get to see Westworld someday on a TV near me! smile

Ricki

#1121993 - 01/06/17 12:17 AM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Paul Churchfield]  
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Thanks Paul and while I'm proud of the write, it's the singer and musicians who bring the song to life, and for that, I am grateful.

Ricki

#1121994 - 01/06/17 12:18 AM Re: Raven Flies [Re: vtoutlander]  
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Thanks for listening John.

Ricki

#1122002 - 01/06/17 05:19 AM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Ricki E. Bellos]  
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Catchy as a bad cold, Ricki. I really enjoyed tapping my toes to it.

Stevie

#1122218 - 01/10/17 12:14 AM Re: Raven Flies [Re: Little_stevie_b]  
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grin I don't think I've ever heard that one, Stevie B! Glad you enjoyed it.

Ricki


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