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#1125578 - 03/20/17 09:57 AM Song Feedback  
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Hey All!!! Looking for some constructive criticism of a recent song I wrote. Any input is appreciated. Thanks and see link below!





#1125602 - 03/20/17 05:39 PM Re: Song Feedback [Re: Trollboy 1]  
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Hello Blake,


Nice to meet you & WELCOME to JPF.
You're sounding real good !

Calvin


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#1125603 - 03/20/17 06:07 PM Re: Song Feedback [Re: Trollboy 1]  
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Thanks! You too!! At least give me some criticisms!

#1125604 - 03/20/17 06:11 PM Re: Song Feedback [Re: Trollboy 1]  
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Well, I like that STYLE of music so with me, it's already off to a good start.

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#1125606 - 03/20/17 07:23 PM Re: Song Feedback [Re: Trollboy 1]  
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when the guitar strumming started out -- I said that sounds like Bob Dylan strumming his guitar on his first album -- and then the harmonica kicked in (ha, ha). Sounds fine and definitely that classic early 1960's folk sound. I would cut down that long intro and get right to the song.

Good song and performance, but nothing that new or unique.


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#1125619 - 03/21/17 12:45 AM Re: Song Feedback [Re: Trollboy 1]  
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Hi, Blake,

Welcome to JPF! Love the harmonica (trying to learn myself--so I'm jealous). Very 1960's folk song--good sound. Agree with Kevin that the intro can be cut short. You're running about four minutes, which is a bit long--your intro is about 45 seconds by my count, and you get your song into a nice time slot by slimming down the intro 20-30 seconds. Oh, and if I haven't said so already, the harmonica is really cool (and I'm still jealous!).

Best regards,

Deej

#1125635 - 03/21/17 10:16 AM Re: Song Feedback [Re: Trollboy 1]  
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Appreciate the input

#1125676 - 03/21/17 09:00 PM Re: Song Feedback [Re: Trollboy 1]  
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Hi BlakeAllyn and welcome to JPF! Very retro folk style you have with the guitar/harp combo. That era had pretty simple melodies like this and a lot of repetition in the lyrics, the easier to get audience participation maybe? so this fits that genre well. As a writer though, I see a lot of real estate going to waste here. You can have some of the repetition and still have plenty of time to get some sort of story going. I was really looking forward to more meat, more imagery, more interest. As it is, I don't know enough about this guy's life to care about him, and I should want to care, right? As a writer, it's your job to make me care. Just my 2 cents worth. Your voice suits this genre as well. Very cool.

Ricki

#1125722 - 03/23/17 11:46 AM Re: Song Feedback [Re: Ricki E. Bellos]  
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Thanks for the advice!!!


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