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#1126175 - 04/04/17 08:04 AM Where is That Line?  
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Where is That Line? (Neil Cotton)

Where is that line
Dividing weak from strong
Lusting from loving,
Right from the wrong
Kidding from being mean

Where is that line
Separating us
Into hated and haters
Selfish and selfless
Envied from being green

Everyone’s unique
In our view of the world
And how we are being seen

Where is that line
Allowing us to judge
The lives of others
The maybes and musts
Choices made being me

Everyone is unique
In our view of the world
And how we are being seen

Where is that line ( 3x )
That line is too fine to see


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#1126179 - 04/04/17 09:31 AM Re: Where is That Line? [Re: Neil Cotton]  
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Awesome Neil!! I am going to steal this song and pretend its my own!!! kidding!

#1126222 - 04/04/17 08:29 PM Re: Where is That Line? [Re: Trollboy 1]  
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LOL...thanks Blake

#1126226 - 04/04/17 10:23 PM Re: Where is That Line? [Re: Neil Cotton]  
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The line is located somewhere right below SHADY CREEK.

MAB

#1126228 - 04/04/17 10:46 PM Re: Where is That Line? [Re: Marc Barnette]  
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Originally Posted by Marc Barnette
The line is located somewhere right below SHADY CREEK.

MAB


LOL... no tan lines at Shady Creek..

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#1126229 - 04/04/17 11:01 PM Re: Where is That Line? [Re: Neil Cotton]  
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Hi Neil,

Very cool, I liked the melody--interesting lyrics and concept. The only word I might consider tweaking, is "allowing." Maybe "causes?" Not sure. The song fits your vocal style well too!

steady-eddie.

#1126235 - 04/05/17 02:02 AM Re: Where is That Line? [Re: Neil Cotton]  
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Neil,

I commented in the Lyrics 3 Forum--again, really admire the lyrics. You've done a great job capturing their spirit as you've put it to music. Pretty cool.

Regards,

Deej

#1126250 - 04/05/17 10:28 AM Re: Where is That Line? [Re: Deej56]  
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Originally Posted by Deej56
Neil,

I commented in the Lyrics 3 Forum--again, really admire the lyrics. You've done a great job capturing their spirit as you've put it to music. Pretty cool.

Regards,

Deej

Thanks Deej
We need this kind of comment to keep at it. Nice to write a song that is working. smile

#1126263 - 04/05/17 02:19 PM Re: Where is That Line? [Re: Neil Cotton]  
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You went really deep for this one, Neil. Thought provoking lyrics. Musically I was thinking it would have more of a striped down acoustic production but, that's just me.

There was only one line I felt didn't fit in with the rest:

Choices made being me

Throughout the song, you speak of us, our and we. To be consistent, maybe:

Choices made by being us

Adding "by" might make it clearer, or not. Anyway, that's all I've got. Well done.

Ricki

#1126270 - 04/05/17 03:14 PM Re: Where is That Line? [Re: Ricki E. Bellos]  
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Originally Posted by Ricki E. Bellos
You went really deep for this one, Neil. Thought provoking lyrics. Musically I was thinking it would have more of a striped down acoustic production but, that's just me.

There was only one line I felt didn't fit in with the rest:

Choices made being me

Throughout the song, you speak of us, our and we. To be consistent, maybe:

Choices made by being us

Adding "by" might make it clearer, or not. Anyway, that's all I've got. Well done.

Ricki


Ricki, good points as always...will consider., for sure...thinking now


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#1126273 - 04/05/17 03:37 PM Re: Where is That Line? [Re: Neil Cotton]  
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a nice job on this one Neil!Mike

#1126275 - 04/05/17 03:48 PM Re: Where is That Line? [Re: Neil Cotton]  
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We are now in what is usually the most fickle month weatherwise, at least here in the Midwest where I live. (Often wonder if T. S. Eliot ever visited at this time and is why he thought of this as the cruelest month). I think the "line" you speak of in the song is about as fickle and apply to just about anything. From a musical standpoint, a song such as "Poetry in Motion", a very popular song in its day and a very positive one, might be considered too sexist for today's culture. Just one of many examples.

#1126312 - 04/06/17 05:26 PM Re: Where is That Line? [Re: E Swartz]  
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Originally Posted by E Swartz
Hi Neil,

Very cool, I liked the melody--interesting lyrics and concept. The only word I might consider tweaking, is "allowing." Maybe "causes?" Not sure. The song fits your vocal style well too!

steady-eddie.

Thanks Eddie, your opinion carries weight.

#1126313 - 04/06/17 05:27 PM Re: Where is That Line? [Re: beechnut79]  
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Originally Posted by beechnut79
We are now in what is usually the most fickle month weather-wise, at least here in the Midwest where I live. (Often wonder if T. S. Eliot ever visited at this time and is why he thought of this as the cruellest month). I think the "line" you speak of in the song is about as fickle and apply to just about anything. From a musical standpoint, a song such as "Poetry in Motion", a very popular song in its day and a very positive one, might be considered too sexist for today's culture. Just one of many examples.

fickle is a good word

#1126356 - 04/08/17 09:42 AM Re: Where is That Line? [Re: Neil Cotton]  
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Hello Neil.


I enjoyed THIS line a lot.....The maybes and musts

Thanks for sharing what you're doing.


Calvin


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#1126362 - 04/08/17 02:05 PM Re: Where is That Line? [Re: Neil Cotton]  
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Nice write! Interesting concept for a tune, I like that. Ricki has a point on the "me" line.


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#1126486 - 04/11/17 10:11 PM Re: Where is That Line? [Re: Kevin Emmrich]  
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Originally Posted by Kevin Emmrich
Nice write! Interesting concept for a tune, I like that. Ricki has a point on the "me" line.

thanks Kevin...I'm almost sold on the change. wink

#1126516 - 04/12/17 01:38 PM Re: Where is That Line? [Re: Neil Cotton]  
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A world away from your usual output Neil and it came up trumps.Even though I did use the dreaded T word!.
Very good song
Travis


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#1126532 - 04/12/17 10:01 PM Re: Where is That Line? [Re: Travis david]  
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Originally Posted by Travis david
A world away from your usual output Neil and it came up trumps.Even though I did use the dreaded T word!.
Very good song
Travis


Thanks...I like it too LOL ... 2 T words LOL


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