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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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Raise a glass V Don't leave flowers on my grave snatches of my life on paper that'll fade say those things to me when i'm still aulive we've shared so many things-hey don't be shy C Lets raise a glass to us today two old friends who often strayed But a bond sealed with memories Old friend you mean a lot to me. If i should go and you should stay raise a glass to us that day V Last went to church years ago preachers eulogise on someone they dont know Rather friends call on me shows they care wish i could spread this notion everywhere
Chorus B Don't leave it, don't you wait cause one day it could be too late Take the time tell those special ones how you feel about them Cause one day, sadly they'll be gone Chorus ------------------ RAISE A GlASS V Don't leave flowers on my grave snatches of my life on paper that'll fade Just say those things when i'm still alive how much you care, go on make me cry C Lets raise a glass to us today two old friends who often strayed But a bond sealed with memories Old friend you mean a lot to me. If i should go and you should stay raise a glass to us that day V Last went to church years ago preachers eulogise on someone they dont know Rather friends call on me shows they care wish i could spread this notion everywhere
Chorus B Don't leave it, don't you wait cause one day it could be too late Take the time tell those special ones how you feel about them Cause one day, they could be gone Chorus
Last edited by Travis david; 10/09/17 03:34 AM.
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Humm Travis, You need to Google THE WHIFFENPOOF SONG by Rudy Vallee, Bing Crosby and other's.
Last edited by Ray E. Strode; 07/05/17 01:17 PM.
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The fact that you 're aware of it Ray is good enough for me Travis
Last edited by Travis david; 07/13/17 05:04 AM.
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Love it Travis. I'm going to post in on my Facebook Page...Barry...
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Thanks Barry thats great Travis
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Travis,
I really like the first verse and chorus of this song. Actually I like what follows as well. But as I read the first verse and chorus, I anticipated this would be a tune about two longtime friends, sometimes at odds. The last two verses aren't as specific to that story and therefore seem disconnected to the chorus. I say this only because this song has tremendous potential, and perhaps reshape the second and third verse to be more specific on the two friends. One suggestion on the chorus lyrics: perhaps "sometimes" rather than "often" in the second line (but depends on your story). Keep working this--it will be a fine tune.
Hope the feedback helps!
Best regards,
Deej
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Hey Travis,
It has been awhile. I hope you are well. Glad to see you are still writing. Best wishes!
Wes
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Hi Wesley Good to see you back again Thanks for stopping by Travis
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Hi Deej Thanks for your help and comments which are always appreciated. Yes it needs a rewrite or two and your points are valid Cheers Travis
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Hey Travis,
I really like where this goes. Well written and straight to the point. Good on ya, sir!
Peace,
Dave
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Cheers Dave. Travis
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Nice sentiment! Suggestion?
Don't leave flowers on my grave snatches of my life on paper that'll fade Just say those things while i'm still alive how much you care, the reason why
Best of luck! -Mike
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Yes I like that Mike and will change it later. Meanwhile I've a new one Thanks Travis
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