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https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13691898

Another completed song with a Mike Zaneski production and vocal. Music and lyric by me.
On discussing the project prior to Mike's work, the name Christy Moore  cropped up once more.
We both like the Christy brand of Irish contemporary folk,so there's more than a hint of his influence here.
Thanks in advance for the listen, and hopefully your comments.
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Her pillow's not big enough for all her dreams.

Chorus
She lies fast asleep, drifting to some distant land
where sugar coated trees and chocolate fountains stand
And bet she  runs through  summer meadows and streams
her pillow's not big enough for all her dreams.

Verse
Piggy back rides, candy bars, cuts on her knees
hugs from her mom a play house in the trees
Falling out with her best friend, making up again
tantrums when she couldn't play out in the rain

Verse
Nursery to college in the blinking of an eye
times in between heartaches. laughter and sighs
toothache, measles, those school grade tests
all that homework done,go give it your best

Chorus
She lies fast asleep, drifting to some distant land
where sugar coated trees and chocolate fountains stand
There she goes running through the meadows and streams
her pillow's not big enough for all her dreams

Verse
When her  prince finally comes sweeps her off her feet
no white charger but her life might be complete
Time to spread those wings she's outgrown the nest
we'll miss her lots around the home,but not the mess!

Bridge
Yes  we'll miss  our little miss  non the less

Chorus 2
When she lay fast asleep, drifting to some distant land
where sugar coated trees and chocolate fountains stand
There she goes running through the meadows and streams
her pillow's not big enough for all her dreams.


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Nice song that definitely has an Irish vibe.

The imagery in the lyrics are outstanding! Well delivered vocal with a nice big sound. The accompaniment was really well done and had just the right 'flavor' for this tune.

Two minor things grabbed my attention:
1. hugs from her mom a play house in the trees => Hugs from her mom, playhouse in the trees (lose the 'a').
2. The transition into the final chorus is a bit abrupt with a kind of minor hiccup in the rhythm (just for a second, then it resumes beautifully).

Mix is excellent although I would have liked that awesome accompaniment to be a bit louder.

Fantastic!

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geez Travis! how well written is this! man what a super job on that end. really enjoyed this song. light, had a bright appealing nature to it.
and Michael Z always on target with his music. writing and music I thought "very pro...Lane

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Travis and Mike,

Well, first, this is so well done—really every aspect shines, from the lyric, melody to the production. I’ll confess, just reading the title to the song, i was thinking this might be something more tongue in cheek (think innuendo). That’s my twisted mind, I guess! But might want to think about that title (and, regardless, it has a typo in that there should at least be an apostrophe in “pillows” (i.e., “pillow’s”). Great tune, awesome production!

All the best,

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Well done, you two. Love the flow of the lyric and the sentiment of the song. As usual, Mike has done this up with style and imagination... while maintaining an Irish sounding melody. Kudos to you both. ----Dave

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Hey this is a really nice one guys. Maybe I am stupid or too tired or something but when I go to the site it is saying the author is John Vaughn.

Did I miss something along the way?

Anyway, beautifully done.


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Travis,

Mike Z did a great job with the music to these wonderful lyrics. Having a daughter, I appreciate much about the song! Nice work guys!

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Thanks for the listen and suggestions TC.
Dropping the A isn't a problem and yes a lot smoother.
I don't hear so good so I take your suggestion.
If and when Mike comes along I'm sure he will address this and the last chorus point.
Pleased you liked it generally though.
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Cheers Lane, that was great feedback.I thank you and Mike for his solid work on the song.
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Definitely get the Christy Moore vibe on this one ...nicely produced and strong lyrics, well done! ( And it can be either pillow's i.e. singular or pillows plural smile )

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Hi guys,


Thumbs up to a job well done.


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Hi Travis and Mike.
A little too much sugar for me, lyrically
but it's well put together and Mike's done a fine job production wise.
When you say you did the music, do you mean the melody?

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Hi Deej you're right of course an apostrophe is needed and sorted cheers
Thanks for your visit and pleased to know you liked the song
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Thanks Dave R
.I always appreciate your visit and comments.
Thanks again for your support
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Hello DS
JV is my real name TD a name i write under usually as there appears to be one too many JV's around.
Thanks for the listen David much appreciated
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"her pillow's not big enough for all her dreams."

Great line. I enjoyed reading the lyrics as well as listening to the song.
Softly landing rhymes throughout the song which is a nice aspect to a song about a sleeping daughter.

Nice job fellas,

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Hi Steady
That's good It was aimed at guys like you lol.
We have two sons so i'd better get writing .
Thanks for the feedback Ed here and on FB
John


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Travis/Mike,

Cool title and nice imagery throughout to chase the idea. A nice listen. A pleasant production.

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Thanks Kevin that's what I thought re the apostrophe but i changed it anyhow lol
Thanks for your ears.
Appreciate your visit
Travis

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Hi Calvin
Thanks once more for your support
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Yes the melody Vic. I wrote the lyric about 4 years ago
shelved it and did a rewrite.
Like you i thought the same thing about it lyrically.
Worried it might be a little too twee.
Mike thought it was sweet and went ahead with a nod to Ireland
Thanks for the listen
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Thanks Martin
I'm pleased it hit the right note with you
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Hi Floyd
Thanjs for your listen and thumbs up.
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Excellent collaboration guys
This has a nice grove to it.

Beautiful concept and title. “Her pillow's not big enough for all her dreams”

I liked the bit of music after the 2nd chorus around 1:25… very cool

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Thanks Mr. N. Pleased you enjoyed it especially Mike's magic
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What sweet lyrics, Travis/John and I really like the quick pace of the song...kinda like a little girl skipping through the fields! smile Well thought out and executed production as well, Mike. Another successful JPF collab!

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Hi Ricki
Thanks for that great feedback!
Regards
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The song has gone to the number one position in two Soundclick charts.
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Charts position
» highest in charts: # 9 (150,503 songs currently listed in Acoustic)
» highest in sub-genre: # 1 (19,735 songs currently listed in Acoustic > Acoustic Folk)
» today's position: # 9 in Acoustic
» today's position in sub-genre: # 1 in Acoustic Folk


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Travis and Mike

Great feel good song, I love it and Helen does as well

God Bless Roy and Helen


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Hi Roy & Helen
Thanks for the listen and feedback.
I've not seen you around for sometime?
All the best to you both, hope you are both keeping well!
Regards
Travis

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Got an email from the BBC who are considering the song for inclusion in their Introducing programme this Thursday.
If it goes ahead it'll get a repeat play on Saturday.
A recent song got four plays but they won't reply to emails asking if there's any response from listeners. Which is annoying!


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That is very awesome, Travis! And I'll be hoping the BBC is smart enough to include it. Congrats!

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Cheers Deej
Fingers crossed.
Thanks
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I'm a late comer to this one but hat's off to you both. When I first saw the title I was figuring this would be another song about a guy not being able to work it out with his wife/girlfriend,lol. Man was I wrong. Love this song. Lyrics bring us all back to our youth and the Irish take is great. Although I'm not Irish I am one day of every year--St. Pat's day,lol. And I've always been partial to the song--Black Velvet Band. Keep up the great work,
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Thanks Roger.
I'm from the Welsh camp along with Dave Rice and Vic Arnold but love the Gaelic influence of the Irish music
Appreciate your thumbs up.,enjoy St Paddy's Day it'll be here soon!
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How cool is that?!

We are fans of open/airy productions like this that offer exactly what is needed (and no more) to
both support rich lyrical imagery and well delivered vocals. This production has those elements in spades.

Nice!

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Thank J & B.
Really appreciate your positive feedback
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I understand the song is getting a play on Friiday on a radio show called Sophie's Springboard. It's local radio station called Source based in Cornwall. Quite a lot of listeners though
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Nice folk type song. Good images and nicely produced. Congratulations on all the "attention" the song is receiving.

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Thanks Iggy!
The song was played tonight on BBC Radio Cumbria's Introducing.The programme is repeated on Saturday.
Thanks for your listen and comment
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The song will be played on Source Radio this afternoon. The shows called Sophie's Springboard.
Vic will be getting a song played also!
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Nice tune. The title hook is really nice as were the overall lyrics and story line. I really like this but have few suggestions.

I was a bit thrown off by the chorus verse, then two verses, then the chorus again. For me, I wasn't sure what was the chorus. Also, not a lot of contrast between the chorus and verses early on. Around 2:00 the choruses change up and become a clearer contrast to the verses. Maybe that fits the style, but I'd prefer to start with a more familiar verse/chorus and provide more contrast between them.

I was also slightly thrown off at first how the song starts with "kid stuff" like "candy bars" and "cuts on knees" and later talks about a prince sweeping her off her feet. Seemed like a really fast transition and the time order a bit off. For example, in the second verse you say "nursery to college in the blinking of an eye" and then talk about "grade school" so it was like going back in time a little. I suggest looking closely at how time moves through the verses. I'd open that second verse with "Nursery to grade school in the blinking of an eye" and end it with her finishing high school.

If you did swap the first chorus and verse you could make the transitions a bit clearer. Verse one about nursery to grade school, verse two about grade school through high school, verse three about college through leaving the nest.

Another thought is to mix up the second line of the chorus so at each stage she's dreaming more and more grown up dreams. The first chorus would be the "sugar coated trees and chocolate fountains stand". The second dream could be about "Falling out with her best friend, making up again" and the third dream could be about the prince sweeping her off her feet.

I came late to this, it's a lot of suggestions, and I see the song is doing well on Soundclick, so feel free to ignore but it's just what struck me as I listened to this really nice song.

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Hi Ant
Thanks for your ears and comments.
I started the song with the chorus to set the scene and felt
also it needed the hook in early to set up the verses,
i know this is usually the other way around lol
To explain the shift i used "times in between"
To my ears there is a subtle shift in the c to the v and as the song moves it becomes more obvious.
This is the direction i wanted really.
No the v c v c structure is'nt in here but if it works i don't believe it matters.
The song has done well on SC number one on two charts
It's also had plays on the UK BBC programme Introducing plus a play on Source Radio so it's been successful.
And i thank Mike's work on it the reason why
Cheers Ant
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The song received a further play on Source Radio today


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Great imagery, Travis - and I love the bouncy Irish feel. Congrats on getting it played!

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Thanks Scott appreciate your listen and comments
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