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by Gavin Sinclair - 04/23/24 06:43 PM
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Designated fool v Another night, same old bar keep on looking still this glass won't tell me where you are v Another session on this stool Heard someone say We call him the designated fool c Those words cut through me like a knife can't even get being drunk right So true, so cruel yeah that's him, the designated fool v Ordered a final Jack then settled my bill And determined i won't be back v Didn't know others could see how she made me feel no more pride left inside of me c Those words cut through me like a knife can't even get being drunk right So true, so cruel yeah that's me, the designated fool
b Least I heard that wake up call why go through all this pain? it's over, she don't care at all
V All bars are out of bounds this designated fool Won't be the joke going round c Those words cut through me like a knife can't even get being drunk right So true, so cruel yeah that's me, the designated fool
Last edited by Travis david; 11/18/18 03:26 PM.
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Liked the title and a lot of the lines. Designated fool is a strong image and I thought you should play it up more in the chorus. I'm the designated fool at the end of the bar, every place has one etc. Best -Mike
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Thanks Mike. I get your idea although the hook does get a mention in the verses too Cheers Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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some good lines...I like that he has shaken himself free from her shadow. Problem I see is that the hook no longer applies in the final chorus
Old words cut through me like a knife Couldn't get, being drunk right So true, so cruel That was me, the designated fool
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