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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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I'm just going to keep posting till you all love me! https://www.soundclick.com/html5/v4/player.cfm?songID=13919000no other word can come first no lie or misperception like the miracle of birth the truth can’t change direction many words never matter nothing new under the sun just wailing in the clatter till the end foretold to come one word from the beginning one word a gift so divine one word spoke of creation one word spoke the end of time and it’s time, time, time….. it’s time committed by principle a duty to maintain course no option to surrender speaking victory foreword driven by understanding that silence is for cowards the battle is deafening a relentless war of words it’s the word worth waiting for the word understood too late it’s the word that became flesh the word that reveals our fate desperate for words to believe to add solace to the fray to quiet the confusion and conclude a darkened day but peace has been forsaken and logic has led astray trade silence for compassion when there’s nothing left to say one word from the beginning one word a gift so divine one word spoke of creation one word spoke the end of time and it’s time, time, time….. it’s time
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Hi Tony:
Well written and well performed. The genre is not in my "wheel-house" so I'm probably the last person you need to provide a review. The recording was excellent and, as I've said before, you have a really good vocal quality.
Best of luck with your music. ----Dave
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Thanks Dave. I guess I’m just going to have to bite the bullet and keep on recording myself lol...
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Like the tune, smoking track...Not gonna tell you what''s right, because there is a ton which is rockin'....But I have 2 things that STICK OUT that I would suggest
You are doing the TITLE an Injustice with no Harmony on your TITLE. Your voice get's drowned out and the TITLE is barely audible...
You need that High harmony ONE WORD...This should give your HOOK sparkle & sizzle....Oh and you need a female harmony...Preferably a sista'....Or at least that or a Christina Aguilera type sound. A BIG VOICE. This will give your CHORUS an anthem-like sound....
Also, changing the 2nd CHORUS to "It's the Word" versus "ONE WORD" & it's continuity and repetiotion is a slight misfire IMO...Keep your CHORUS the same. It get's confusing to listeners and when the CHORUS rolls around you want them yelling "ONE WORD"...This way they can't wait till you come back to the part where they can sing "ONE WORD"....
At least this is what I hear.....
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Raw and edgy with stellar lyrics that set the mind to pondering all of your rocking thoughts. Sound advice and what a sound it has. Nicely done.
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Damn Good one buddy! I agree about keeping the chorus the same.
Ckiphen
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"You need that High harmony ONE WORD...This should give your HOOK sparkle & sizzle....Oh and you need a female harmony...Preferably a sista'....Or at least that or a Christina Aguilera type sound. A BIG VOICE. This will give your CHORUS an anthem-like sound...." ABSOLUTELY WHOLE HEARTEDLY AGREE!!!! Been looking for a singer for years lol Thanks guys!
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The music and lyric are a nice match. Your lyrics invite rereading, with lines that remind me both of protest and prog-rock. Abstract but with enough bite to create visuals in my head. Enjoying your work.. Mike
Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice Fortune depends on the tone of your voice
-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon) from the song "Songs of Love" from the album "Casanova" (1996)
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"Your lyrics invite rereading......" That’s truly a complement! I miss vinyl records.... the sleeves, the fold outs, the artwork, the LYRICS! It would take me hours to fully absorb a new album when I was a kid
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Tight composition, enjoyed it.
For fun I suggest that you consider writing rap metered lyrics to this music. Might sound good too.
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lol... Yea, I’ve got rhythm!
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Japov,
I like the newer re-mix as the vocals are sitting on top which is needed with the edgy vibe. Profound lyrics aren't digested until one has listened and learned the song a bit for sure, which is normal and a good thing--but they add as what Mike said, "a desire to go back and better understand their more specific meaning."
One thought on your guitar solo at bridge ending..........maybe try panning that lead guitar riff to the right? Maybe keep 20%L. I know performing live it may not be panned, but for the recording I think that movement would give it a more pronounced and significant identity--JMO.
Great work here!
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Thanks Eddie! I actually considered using a ping-pong delay on the solo but it got a little muddled... So I decided to keep it raw and, as you said, easy to reproduce. I'm a very plug-n-play kinda' guy
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Hi Japov Really good lyric was my first thought then I had a listen and that was good too.. Best of luck with it Joh
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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