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by MFB III. 12/06/19 12:44 AM
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#1157280 - 10/03/19 06:54 PM
Connection
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TamsNumber4
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Hello JPF Family. I just finished 50/90, I only created 12 songs in the last 90 days, but it is better than nothing. I still co-run a songwriting group here in NH, I have been doing that for 5 years. I perform at open mics, I perform in a duet group for money!! LOL! Money is nice and I also co-run an open mic for money! LOL! Been a long time since I recorded acapella songs in the shower! I have an Art Event where I will be selling my photos in October. Staying busy, but always have my JPF family in my heart and mind and missing everyone! This is one of my favorite songs I just created this week for 50/90: (be prepared for my mad mando skills LOL! I try.... CONNECTION on SoundCloudConnection by Tammy Jann © 2019 Did you ever want to hear what I have to say My words flutter around you then fly away I wish you could take them in I wish they were worth a listen you and I are missing a connection Did you ever want to see the world around me moon, stars, flowers, trees colors in my atmosphere I wish you saw natures perfection witness my life from every direction you and I are missing a connection Chorus I need to go on a journey to find the eyes of the one that is searching for mine the heart that beats to the rhythm of my soul my connection, my story that' never been told Did you ever want to feel what I'm like to touch holding hands feels so safe is that asking too much would you reach out and touch my skin do you ever want this kind of affection you and I are missing a connection Chorus I need to go on a journey to find the eyes of the one that is searching for mine the heart that beats to the rhythm of my soul my connection, my story that' never been told
Last edited by TamsNumber4; 10/03/19 06:56 PM.
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#1157294 - 10/03/19 11:18 PM
Re: Connection
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Michael Zaneski
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Hi Tammy, Beautiful song and a wonderfully intimate performance. Your phrasing feels very real and honest and your voice carries a range of emotions and is on target with them in every line. 'I need to go on a journey to find the eyes of the one that is searching for mine" That's magic there.. The singer's self-affirmation feels real and earned and helps carry her on that journey to find that real connection.It's refreshing to hear this from a woman sung in the first person with no attempt at making "clever" the main thing, and so the sincerity and warmth shine on through very clearly. Well done, and great to hear from you and thanks for catching us up on what you've been doing.  Mike
Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 10/04/19 02:11 PM.
Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice Fortune depends on the tone of your voice
-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon) from the song "Songs of Love" from the album "Casanova" (1996)
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#1157672 - 10/11/19 10:59 PM
Re: Connection
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Lovely song. And I love the lyrics - some of those near rhymes are inspired - like listen/connection - whodda thoiught that would work?  Really good vocals and you stay true to the hook. At over 4 mins it could use a haircut but I enjoyed it muchly  Boy there's some talent on this here forum  Paul
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#1158531 - 11/09/19 01:36 PM
Re: Connection
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Gary,
I do appreciate your thoughts. The trick of lyric writing is the meaning and with a few word changes like "could to would", you change the original meaning of the song. The chorus that held a purpose, now means something different. I see this as your perspective, but it isn't one of a woman who is telling her side of a story. The point of the story is being involved with someone that isn't capable of this relationship and can't see the possibilities or who isn't trying, which makes her yearning and saying "could", knowing he isn't capable. This is someone who is having a relationship and wanting something that isn't going to happen and that the other person isn't going to be able to understand. So the chorus intention is for her to convince herself to move on. There is no more questioning, she is trying to convince herself and reassure herself of the possibilities. Your changes would change the meaning and direction of the original write and I did consider the chorus/prechorus/bridge situation of the song, but I wanted to please myself vocally and challenge myself to change up my own and very usual structure and play with it a bit. I run a songwriting group and we challenge ourselves this way. I do again, appreciate the time and thought you put to this.
Tammy
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