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#1160767 - 01/19/20 04:24 PM "Not All Heroes Wear Capes"  
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Recording here [/url]https://soundcloud.com/lunarsimonamusic/not-all-heroes-wear-capes

v1
It’s too damn disappointing
How so many people don’t understand
The meaning of being a pointless human
A man without a plan

v2
Wouldn’t you rather make a difference
When things go bad in the world live for what it’s worth?
Life may be short or not in everyone’s eyes
But to hope the worst will change on its own
Is like a shot in the dark

CHORUS
It may not be easy
To put on a smile and make a difference
Not anyone can leave their doubts behind
Keep your head up high
It’ll be alright
To be a better person takes a leap of faith
Not all heroes need capes

v3
A kid without motivation
Has no potential at all
Once they pull the wings that fueled his own world
Of positivity and creativity
Hopelessness is now his death
His inner infantile is subject to the enemy

v4
The crowds the fans the followers
The role models the gods the icons
All have one thing in common
They wanna have some credit
But who’s just there to be a slave to hate
And who among them are the saviors?

REP. CHORUS
It may not be easy
To put on a smile and make a difference
Not anyone could leave their doubts behind
Keep your head up high
It’ll be alright
It takes a leap of faith
To be a hero without a cape

It may not be easy
To put on a smile and make a difference
Not anyone can leave their doubts behind
Keep your head up high
It’ll be alright
It takes a leap of faith
Not everybody can save
Someone will wear a cape.


Aries. INFP-T. Artist of all trades. Listener and creator of vast, unexpected musical genre writings/compositions.
Art is the journey of a free soul.
-Alev Oguz
http://soundcloud.com/lunarsimonamusic
#1160776 - 01/20/20 12:30 AM Re: "Not All Heroes Wear Capes" [Re: LunaSimone]  
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I try to imagine myself in a cape.... All I see is OZZY in white with a cross on his back lol...

Those are some very meaningful, but highly syncopated and off beat lyrics you’ve got there Simone. Instead of just straight 4/4, have you ever considered stringing together repetitive phrases "out of time" like YES or TOOL?

#1160830 - 01/22/20 01:19 AM Re: "Not All Heroes Wear Capes" [Re: LunaSimone]  
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Luna,

There’s a lot to work with here. Musically, I like the sound and what you have going on . . . though the lyrics strike me as a bit busy and in need of paring down—there are only so many syllables this melody will support, so word choice is paramount. Refining and focusing the lyric will also make the vocal a bit easier to sing, and make it a bit less rushed in certain spots. Again, I like where you are going with this—just needs a little bit of elbow grease to help it shine.

Regards,

Deej

#1161110 - 01/28/20 09:19 AM Re: "Not All Heroes Wear Capes" [Re: LunaSimone]  
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Luna,

I like the your heavy rock concept and even the vocal style you have going with the combination of talking & singing. The music has a solid driving melody vibe perfect for the style of vocals you are doing. I like what Deej said previous to me. If I were producing this with you, I would do a lot of vocal takes on each of the song's sections. I would ask you to look at the speaking lines and exude/express even more attitude. I would look at key singing lines where you're singing melody for improving pitch. With this type of music when you're talk-singing, you still need on key phrase endings to hit the notes on key, else you'll have a noticeable pitch incongruity--that's happening a few times--I know you can do it correctly, because you are in certain areas and aren't in others. Don't let your attitude affect pitch control--really listen to yourself inwardly when singing and not too much to the music in your headphones. I have the same issues at times with certain music transitions--I'll slide one headphone off my ear and put it tight to my head to avoid "headphone bleed." In this manner I can hear myself better which keeps you on pitch much better. Sometimes it may take a few takes to get it right, and give your ears a rest if you're having a problem in a certain spot of the song.

I think there's a lot of potential for this song if you could take both production to the next level and tweak your vocals as I mentioned above just in a few places. But don't be afraid to go "over the top" with attitude also in some spots, think of some of your fav singers and how they would sing the song and absorb that attitude!

Great start here, thanks for sharing, and my comments are "Just my opinion," and you can use or lose, and thank-you for sharing your song. We need some more hard-rock writers around here!

steady-eddie


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