Who's Online Now
27 registered members (Dave Rice, AntonyRobWells, 9ne, Brian Austin Whitney, CTthomas, couchgrouch, Everett Adams, E Swartz, 4 invisible), and 404 guests, and
Key: Admin, Global Mod, Mod
Shout Box
Member Spotlight
MidniteBob
MidniteBob
Raleigh, ya'll
Posts: 2,712
Joined: January 2008
Show All Member Profiles 
What's Going On
That's How it Goes
by Songbird52. 07/14/20 04:01 PM
NEW MEMBERS CHECK HERE
by Gavin Sinclair. 07/14/20 04:00 PM
Edit: ALL Corona Virus Post MUST Go Here
by Fdemetrio. 07/14/20 02:30 PM
A Daydream Night
by Fdemetrio. 07/14/20 02:14 PM
New York City Cowboy
by Steve Altonian. 07/14/20 02:00 PM
Pretty Smart Sister
by Vicarn. 07/14/20 12:44 PM
What did you do in the war dad? Rewrite
by Travis david. 07/14/20 11:28 AM
SADNESS IN HIS FACE
by CTthomas. 07/14/20 10:26 AM
HOW TO MAKE YOUR WEBSITE POPULAR
by MusicLand. 07/14/20 06:29 AM
SPRING BANK FERRY (Demo for DAVE RICE)
by E Swartz. 07/14/20 12:13 AM
Piano (instrumental)
by Irwin. 07/13/20 11:23 PM
You Shine // just added Ourstage link
by John W. Selleck. 07/13/20 04:59 PM
Made in America, an oldie revised
by John W. Selleck. 07/13/20 04:44 PM
Any producer looking for a song/hook writer?
by Fdemetrio. 07/13/20 02:38 PM
Rare old times. Travis and Vic
by Travis david. 07/13/20 08:33 AM
This Far Before
by Travis david. 07/13/20 07:12 AM
Cupid Got Mad
by RossM. 07/13/20 06:15 AM
The Lord Your God
by E Swartz. 07/12/20 10:10 PM
SPF 15
by E Swartz. 07/12/20 09:29 PM
In Silence (NIkki Nikita's lyrics)
by Guy E. Trepanier. 07/12/20 06:55 PM
Anyone seen Mackie H. lately?
by E Swartz. 07/12/20 05:49 PM
So Where Does Your Song Rank On Ourstage?
by John W. Selleck. 07/12/20 01:36 PM
SHOWCASE: LYRICS/SONGS/ESSAYS BY GARY E. ANDREWS
by Gary E. Andrews. 07/11/20 10:11 PM
Let's Agree to Disagree
by John W. Selleck. 07/11/20 06:50 PM
A part of me
by John W. Selleck. 07/11/20 06:05 PM
Publishing Adm Services
by John W. Selleck. 07/11/20 12:30 AM
This body that I see
by John W. Selleck. 07/10/20 06:31 PM
Can't Make You Love Me
by Songbird52. 07/10/20 10:25 AM
Angels?
by Vicarn. 07/09/20 07:39 AM
I Canít Wait To Fall Asleep Tonight
by CTthomas. 07/08/20 08:40 PM
Top Posters(All Time)
Calvin 19,834
Travis david 11,892
Kevin Emmrich 10,660
Jean Bullock 10,330
Kaley Willow 10,240
Two Singers 9,637
Joice Marie 9,186
Mackie H. 8,845
glynda 8,677
Mike Dunbar 8,574
Tricia Baker 8,318
Colin Ward 7,909
couchgrouch 7,781
Dave Rice 7,710
Corey 7,357
Mark Kaufman 6,584
Vicarn 6,580
Wyman Lloyd 6,578
ben willis 6,107
Lynn Orloff 5,788
Louis 5,725
niteshift 5,683
Linda Sings 5,608
KimberlyinNC 5,210
Neil Cotton 4,909
Derek Hines 4,893
DonnaMarilyn 4,666
Blake Hill 4,528
Bob Cushing 4,376
Roy Cooper 4,241
Bill Osofsky 4,199
Tom Shea 4,179
Cindy Miller 4,178
TamsNumber4 4,104
nightengale 4,096
MFB III 3,926
Caroline 3,865
Kolstad 3,814
Dan Sullivan 3,710
beechnut79 3,580
E Swartz 3,492
Dottie 3,427
joewatt 3,411
Bill Cooper 3,279
John Hoffman 3,199
Skip Johnson 3,027
Pam Hurley 3,007
Terry G 3,005
PopTodd 2,890
Harriet Ames 2,870
Nigel Quin 2,842
MidniteBob 2,712
Nelson 2,603
Tom Tracy 2,558
Polly Hager 2,526
Jerry Jakala 2,524
Al Alvarez 2,499
Eric Thome 2,448
Hummingbird 2,401
Fdemetrio 2,396
Stan Loh 2,263
Sam Wilson 2,242
Judy Hollier 2,232
Wendy D 2,219
Erica Ellis 2,202
TrumanCoyote 2,096
Marty Helly 2,027
maccharles 1,988
DukeWill 1,988
floyd jane 1,985
Martin Lide 1,972
Clint Anglin 1,904
cindyrella 1,888
David Wright 1,866
Clairejeanne 1,851
Cindy LaRosa 1,824
Ronald Boyt 1,675
Iggy 1,650
Noel Downs 1,620
Rick Heenan 1,608
Cal 1,574
Jack Swain 1,554
GocartMoz 1,552
Pete Larsen 1,537
Ann Tygart 1,529
Tom Breshers 1,487
Tom Franz 1,473
RogerS 1,471
Chuck Crowe 1,441
Ralph Blight 1,440
Kenneth Cade 1,429
Rick Norton 1,428
bholt 1,411
Letha Allen 1,408
in2piano 1,404
Stan Simons 1,402
mattbanx 1,384
Jen Shaner 1,373
Charlie Wong 1,347
KevinP 1,324
Vondelle 1,316
Tom W. 1,313
Jan Petter 1,301
Deej56 1,298
scottandrew 1,292
DakLander 1,265
PeteG 1,242
Ian Ferrin 1,230
Glen King 1,214
Gerry 1,210
IdeaGuy 1,209
lane1777 1,177
AaronAuthier 1,177
summeoyo 1,169
Diane Ewing 1,158
joro 1,082
BobbyJoe 1,075
S.DEE 1,040
yann 1,037
Tony A 1,016
IronKnee 1,008
argo 986
peaden 984
Wolvman 960
90 dB 942
9ne 924
Jak Kelly 912
krtinberg 890
Drifter 886
Petra 883
RJC 845
Brenda152 840
Nadia 829
Juan 797
TKO 784
Dayson 781
frahmes 781
teletwang 762
ant 747
Andy K 746
tbryson 737
Andy Kemp 734
Jackie444 731
3daveyO3 704
Dixie 701
Joy Boy 695
Knute 686
Lee Arten 678
Irwin 667
Katziis 652
R.T.MOORE 638
Pat Hardy 637
Moosesong 637
quality 637
CG King 622
douglas 621
Mel 614
NaomiSue 601
Shandy 589
Ria 587
TAMERA64 583
qbaum 570
nitepiano 566
JAPOV 563
pRISCILLA 556
Tink2 553
musica 539
deanbell 528
RobertK 527
R&M 525
BonzaiWag 523
Roderic 522
BB Wilbur 511
goodfolks 499
Zeek 487
Stu 486
Steve P. 481
KathyW 462
allenb 459
MaxG 458
Philjo 454
fanito 448
trush48 448
dmk 442
arealrush 437
DGR 436
avweek 435
Stephen D 433
Emmy 431
Rob L 426
marquez 422
kit 419
Softkrome 417
kyrksongs 415
RRon 408
Laura G. 407
VNORTH 407
Debra 407
eb 406
cuebald 399
EdPerrone 399
Dannyk1 395
Hobart 395
Davyboy49 393
Smile 389
GJShades 387
Ezt 384
tone 380
Marla 380
Cecilee 379
ckiphen 378
iggyiggy 378
coalminer 377
java 374
spidey 371
Previous Thread
Next Thread
Print Thread
Rate This Thread
#1126321 - 04/06/17 11:49 PM Under Stone  
Joined: Jan 2011
Posts: 647
Ricky Layne Offline
Top 500 Poster
Ricky Layne  Offline
Top 500 Poster

Joined: Jan 2011
Posts: 647
Oregon
I posted this as a 1+1 but I don't think I ever posted this version with production...

https://soundcloud.com/subspacefreq/under-stone

How is the mix? (and any other comments welcome)

UNDER STONE

I'm a man with an unrealistic goal
Eternity
As time breaks me down I'm facing a new
Reality
Mortality

Words for my engraving
Here lies a man who needed saving

A young man still argues with my soul
To spite me
As sunset brings applause from all the stars
A finality
That bites me

The speed of the trains increasing
And I can feel my tracks descending
Take me home
Take me home
Under stone

I'll be waiting for the masters key
While some pretty weeds grow over me
All my feelings they will suspend
In the garden next to my friends
Until we breathe again

The beat of my heart's decreasing
Kill the machine that keeps me dreaming
Take me home
Take me home
Take me home
Take me home
Under stone

Words on my engraving
Here lies a man who needed saving

#1126325 - 04/07/17 08:15 AM Re: Under Stone [Re: Ricky Layne]  
Joined: Nov 2010
Posts: 6,580
Vicarn Online content
Top 40 Poster
Vicarn  Online Content
Top 40 Poster

Joined: Nov 2010
Posts: 6,580
UK
What's not to like?
Love the lyrics.

Vic


It's never too late? Yes it is, so do it now.

If, given time, a monkey can write the complete works of Shakespeare maybe there's hope for me.

http://store.cdbaby.com/cd/vicarnold2

http://www.soundclick.com/vicarnold

http://soundcloud.com/vic-arnold

#1126338 - 04/07/17 07:43 PM Re: Under Stone [Re: Ricky Layne]  
Joined: Feb 2005
Posts: 7,710
Dave Rice Online content
Top 30 Poster
Dave Rice  Online Content
Top 30 Poster

Joined: Feb 2005
Posts: 7,710
Texas
I've been trying to find time to give this "interesting title" a listen... and I was not disappointed. Your lyric was intriguing and the melody has a "folkish" aire to it... and to me, quite special. After listening, it made me start wondering how I would have arranged it... and I doubt if I could have matched your creativity. Well done. Best of luck with it. ----Dave

#1126339 - 04/07/17 07:54 PM Re: Under Stone [Re: Ricky Layne]  
Joined: Apr 2008
Posts: 6,894
Ricki E. Bellos Offline
Top 40 Poster
Ricki E. Bellos  Offline
Top 40 Poster

Joined: Apr 2008
Posts: 6,894
Wisconsin
This is awesome, Ricky. Interesting and fresh lyrically, it's nicely produced and I was so glad you didn't go the way of a dirge musically. Good work.

Ricki

#1126353 - 04/08/17 09:37 AM Re: Under Stone [Re: Ricky Layne]  
Joined: Apr 2002
Posts: 19,834
Calvin Offline
Top 10 Poster
Calvin  Offline
Top 10 Poster

Joined: Apr 2002
Posts: 19,834
Okeechobee, Florida U.S.A.
Hi Ricky,

Wow, this is beautifully done, hats off to you !

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

#1126368 - 04/08/17 09:10 PM Re: Under Stone [Re: Ricky Layne]  
Joined: Nov 2011
Posts: 3,492
E Swartz Online content
Top 100 Poster
E Swartz  Online Content
Top 100 Poster

Joined: Nov 2011
Posts: 3,492
Ohio
Ricky,

What a wonderful concept and beautiful lyrics with a great melody & rhythm to this song. Cool harmonies that really give this song great build. Any sugs from me........you know I have to have at least one, but only a sug not a nit. On the ending epitaph, you might consider a short interlude or longer pause separating those last lines to empower the very last line.

Well done!

steady-eddie.

#1126378 - 04/09/17 09:31 AM Re: Under Stone [Re: Ricky Layne]  
Joined: Feb 2017
Posts: 123
Toby Barns Offline
Serious Contributor
Toby Barns  Offline
Serious Contributor

Joined: Feb 2017
Posts: 123
Central Illinois
Nice "unconventional" lyrical phrasing.

Really nice finger-picking.

Melody, harmony, production - awesome!

#1126399 - 04/09/17 06:52 PM Re: Under Stone [Re: Ricky Layne]  
Joined: Dec 2016
Posts: 1,298
Deej56 Offline
Top 200 Poster
Deej56  Offline
Top 200 Poster

Joined: Dec 2016
Posts: 1,298
Ricky,

Just wanted to chime in and add my voice to those above--really strong tune, musically, lyrically, everything. Love the guitar work. Thanks for sharing.

Deej

#1126565 - 04/13/17 03:57 PM Re: Under Stone [Re: Ricky Layne]  
Joined: Jan 2011
Posts: 647
Ricky Layne Offline
Top 500 Poster
Ricky Layne  Offline
Top 500 Poster

Joined: Jan 2011
Posts: 647
Oregon
Vic --- Thanks!

Dave --- Thanks for taking the time. I had the guitar riff for a few years before figuring out how to put a vocal melody to it. "Creative" is kind of how this turned out in the end. For example I really like the G to B in the verses....sounds different to me but works. Thanks again!

Ricki --- I had the music first on this one and I know it doesn't match perfectly with the dark lyrics...but I agree with you in that it doesn't have to sound sad. Just a man that is resolved to his end. (many are reminded of Dust In The Wind by Kansas for obvious reasons with the guitar picking but even the lyrical content is pretty similar...) Thanks!!!

Eddie --- Thanks for the comments! Glad you liked it. As I mentioned this was a back burner song that finally got finished. Thanks for the sug too. I think I can hear what you mean and it might be easy to fix that. I'll give it a try...

Toby --- Definitely unconventional in spots. Thanks for the compliments !!!

#1161797 - 02/24/20 08:12 PM Re: Under Stone [Re: Ricky Layne]  
Joined: Oct 2017
Posts: 2,396
Fdemetrio Online content
Top 200 Poster
Fdemetrio  Online Content
Top 200 Poster

Joined: Oct 2017
Posts: 2,396
Awesome,kind of 70's singer songwriter ish. Really nice song with a great sound!

#1162069 - 03/04/20 05:23 PM Re: Under Stone [Re: Ricky Layne]  
Joined: Jul 2008
Posts: 8,677
glynda Offline
glynda  Offline

Top 20 Poster

Joined: Jul 2008
Posts: 8,677
Princeton Texas
Love this song very much and your voice..great all around..

glyn

#1162509 - 03/28/20 09:14 PM Re: Under Stone [Re: Ricky Layne]  
Joined: Nov 2011
Posts: 3,492
E Swartz Online content
Top 100 Poster
E Swartz  Online Content
Top 100 Poster

Joined: Nov 2011
Posts: 3,492
Ohio
Ricky,

Sounds good man, I'm a bit rusty on the 1st version--but enjoyed this much.

steady-eddie

#1162536 - 03/29/20 07:18 PM Re: Under Stone [Re: Ricky Layne]  
Joined: Jul 2011
Posts: 1,008
IronKnee Offline
Top 500 Poster
IronKnee  Offline
Top 500 Poster

Joined: Jul 2011
Posts: 1,008
Hawaii
Hey There Ricky....so good to see / hear you. It's been a while, and it seems you've been practicing!!
Great guitar playing...and a very nicely written song. I enjoyed the vocals, too!
Love the whole production, man!
-Tom


Support Just Plain Folks

We would like to keep the membership in Just Plain Folks FREE! Your donation helps support the many programs we offer including Road Trips and the Music Awards.


Membership
Join Just Plain Folks
to receive the free
JPNotes Newsletter!
*this is separate from
message board registration*

Newest Members
CraigAllen, Styillz, Cloudrider, Don1955, Autumn22
21281 Registered Users
Forum Statistics
Forums116
Topics120,538
Posts1,134,153
Members21,281
Average Posts Daily40
Most Online37,523
Jan 25th, 2020
Just Plain Quotes
"Even if it appears you have lost, you can still win by maintaining your integrity, your civility and your humanity" -Brian Austin Whitney
Today's Birthdays
No Birthdays
Popular Topics(Views)
Powered by UBB.threads™ PHP Forum Software 7.6.0