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#1162744 - 04/05/20 12:56 PM One Day (just not today)  
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(v)
One day, I just might be able to
Take control of my heart again
Instead of watchin' love come and go
Like the dust blown' in the wind

(v)
(And) One day, I just might be able to
Close my eyes and not feel the pain
Someday, I'll forget the day you left
For now, your memory remains

(chorus)
Yes, one day, just not today
You'll finally know what lonely means
How it feels to fall apart at the seams
And one day, just not today
You'll walk alone on the street called broken dreams
And finally understand what leavin' means
Yes, one day, just not today

(v)
One day, I might be able to
Hear our song and cry no longer
Get myself up off the bedroom floor
Each passing day, I'll grow stronger

(chorus)
Yes, one day, just not today
You'll finally know what lonely means
How it feels to fall apart at the seams
And one day, just not today
You'll walk alone on the street called broken dreams
And finally understand what leavin' means
Yes, one day, just not today

(bridge)
And one day, I might be able to
Lose your memory in my head
Not be a prisoner in my own bed

(tag)
One day, just not today


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#1162751 - 04/05/20 05:03 PM Re: One Day (just not today) [Re: amremt6]  
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Good write.

Vic


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If, given time, a monkey can write the complete works of Shakespeare maybe there's hope for me.

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#1162752 - 04/05/20 06:25 PM Re: One Day (just not today) [Re: Vicarn]  
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Thanks. What I am going through today.


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#1163146 - 04/13/20 12:57 PM Re: One Day (just not today) [Re: amremt6]  
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I'd suggest this arrangement, Verse/Chorus, Verse/Chorus, Verse, Bridge, Chorus, Coda. If you have a Third Verse you may not need a Bridge. Or an Instrumental Bridge might serve better than a Lyrical Bridge. Or you might not need a Verse III, using a Bridge after the second giving of the Chorus, and coming back with the Chorus and Coda to end.

"One Day (Just Not Today)"
(Verse I)
One Day, I just might be able to
Take control of my heart again
Instead of watchin' love come and go
Like the dust blown' in the wind

(Chorus)
Yes, One Day, Just Not Today
You'll finally know what lonely means
How it feels to fall apart at the seams
One Day, Just Not Today
You'll walk alone on the street called broken dreams
And finally understand what leavin' means
Yes, One Day, Just Not Today

(Verse II)
One Day, I just might be able to
Close my eyes and not feel the pain
Someday, I'll forget the day you left
For now, your memory remains

Yes, One Day, Just Not Today
You'll finally know what lonely means
How it feels to fall apart at the seams
One Day, Just Not Today
You'll walk alone on the street called broken dreams
And finally understand what leavin' means
Yes, One Day, Just Not Today

(Bridge)
One Day, I might be able to
Lose your memory in my head
Not be a prisoner in my own bed

(Verse III)
One Day, I might be able to
Hear our song and cry no longer
Get myself up off the bedroom floor
Each passing day, I'll grow stronger

Yes, One Day, Just Not Today
You'll finally know what lonely means
How it feels to fall apart at the seams
One Day, Just Not Today
You'll walk alone on the street called broken dreams
And finally understand what leavin' means
Yes, One Day, Just Not Today

(Coda)
One Day, Just Not Today


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#1163454 - 04/20/20 06:18 PM Re: One Day (just not today) [Re: amremt6]  
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I also think you should add something past the bridge - but only a chorus. I'd hold off until you get a tune to decide if the Coda would make the song better.

Summeoyo

#1164979 - 06/03/20 05:38 PM Re: One Day (just not today) [Re: amremt6]  
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hi, my only problem here is a common one

For now, your memory remains

your memory
belongs to the other person
the singer should be saying
Memories of you remain

apart from that it's a good lyric
all the best,john


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#1164989 - 06/04/20 10:40 AM Re: One Day (just not today) [Re: amremt6]  
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Good write. Look forward to hearing the song.


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