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Chorus 1:

Can't make you love me,
can't make you think of (long for) me,
can't make you see the light inside me,
or want to lie beside me.

Oh I can't make you love me.

Chorus 2:

Can't make you love me,
can't make you wa-ant me,
can't make you wish for the things I think should be,
or see the things that I can see.

No I can't make you love me.

Verses:

You'll never meet me in the darkness,
and reach out to my soul,
as it reaches out forever
for the love it could not hold.

You never could hear +my heart
as it called out to yours,
so I watched in silence
as you closed all your doors.

I have named all the children
that we never had
got lost in hopeless fantasies
of the life we could have made.

And I sank into that ocean
of loss and tragedy,
+raging at the +heartless fates,
that would not bend for me-e-e.

Hi Polly,
I like the stlye of this. The idea/hook has been used a lot, but this one works well. The only nits I have are; I would like to hear your first verse start the song, some need to start with a chorus just so we get the gist before we hear a verse, this one does not. I also like finger picking a lot and would like to hear an instrumental break before the last verse and chorus. You could also change the timing/feel of the last verse and make it into a bridge. Just my thoughts, Keep or sweep.

I think that the lyrics are nicely written.
Up until the last two verses, they struck me as a bitter sweet musings....and then you made it real with a very hard edge.

There was a strident contrast in moods to my sensibilities, but I enjoy seeing people write the truth.
It looks like the truth.



I have named all the children
that we never had
got lost in hopeless fantasies
of the life we could have made.

And I sank into that ocean
of loss and tragedy,
+raging at the +heartless fates,
that would not bend for me-e-e.

Thank you John! Thanks for listening and for the suggestions.

Thank you Martin! Yeah it's the truth, as far as the feelings. I don't always stick to facts, but the feelings are always true. Thank you for listening!!

Only problem I have with this tune is the finality of it. No hope for this singer on The TWIN FLAME journey.

Verses:

You'll never meet me in the darkness,
and reach out to my soul,
as it reaches out forever...


But it happens every day...Some will only have 5th dimension encounters with their TWIN the rest of their life...

What you speak is truth, but doesn’t mean the listener has to like it. Some of us “can’t handle the truth”

Haha, yeah, I get a lot of complaints like that! Yes, could be 5th dimension hope, that is always possible. But this is supposed to be about the no way never situation. And the hope is that eventually we go on to something better, 'cause that one we were hanging on to wasn't the right one anyway.

Great song, especially the lyric. No sugar coating - I like that, it feels honest.

I have named all the children
that we never had

Those are powerful lines.

I kind of agree with John about the chorus. Partly, it's just because 5 repetitions of the chorus (even with the variations) is a lot and the listener could get tired of listening to it, good though it is.

Thank you Gavin! I'm glad it feels honest, I really did try to express an honest feeling, that maybe everyone has experienced. Well I did.

Hi Polly ...

Nice to "meet" you!

Although sadly melancholic, it speaks a difficult truth. I'm okay with a song starting with the chorus ... if the lyric or music demands it. In this case, I think it works in this one. I have 4 or 5 songs that start with the chorus. Your pretty voice is complimented by a very sweet-sounding acoustic guitar. Very nice listen!

Wishing you the best. Be safe ...

Alan

Thank you Alan!