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#1167731 - 08/13/20 03:27 PM Dawn in London Time - collab w/ @HappyDays  
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Collab with a fellow Canadian who goes by the moniker HappyDays.and wrote the lyrics.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sS3Nj61Cm9U

Dawn in London Time

Simple days were long ago
When you and I were holding close
Thatís before I had to let you go

Your fate was in another zone
Changing zip codes, different homes
And now, it's come to this: Iím alone
So Alone

And itís dawn in London time
I wish you knew the way Iím feeling
While I'm crying in your night
Youíre wide awake in my evening
Itís dawn in London time

For weeks now next to nothing comes
A text, a call, they're only crumbs
I wonder if the flight has left you numb?

I thought that I could handle it
We deserve much more than this
Will I be strong enough without your kiss?
I miss your kiss

Ďcause itís dawn in London time
I wish you knew the way Iím feeling
While I'm crying in your night
Youíre wide awake in my evening
Itís dawn in London time
...

Itís dawn in London time
I wish you knew the way Iím feeling
While I'm crying in your night
Youíre wide awake in my evening
Itís dawn in London time

#1167733 - 08/13/20 04:07 PM Re: Dawn in London Time - collab w/ @HappyDays [Re: PaulCanuck]  
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Real nice Paul....love the way the chorus breaks out and the way you colour its ending


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#1167750 - 08/13/20 07:11 PM Re: Dawn in London Time - collab w/ @HappyDays [Re: PaulCanuck]  
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Enjoyed my listen, Paul:

Nice melody, effective lyric and great performance. Best of luck with it.

----Dave

#1167758 - 08/13/20 08:47 PM Re: Dawn in London Time - collab w/ @HappyDays [Re: PaulCanuck]  
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Great! I have nothing to add to that smile

#1167774 - 08/14/20 06:37 AM Re: Dawn in London Time - collab w/ @HappyDays [Re: PaulCanuck]  
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Hi Paul

Really nice poignant song, very enjoyable.

Nigel

PS. Good to see you got Big Ben's clock working again wink

#1167797 - 08/14/20 11:57 AM Re: Dawn in London Time - collab w/ @HappyDays [Re: PaulCanuck]  
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Good job, Paul.
Now you have to write the whole musical. :-)

Vic


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#1167812 - 08/14/20 02:52 PM Re: Dawn in London Time - collab w/ @HappyDays [Re: PaulCanuck]  
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Paul,

An exceptional melody, especially the hook. Great potential here--(Billy Joel-esk).

steady-eddie

#1167934 - 08/17/20 10:13 AM Re: Dawn in London Time - collab w/ @HappyDays [Re: PaulCanuck]  
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John, Dave, Gavin, Nigel, Vic and Eddie - thanks for the kind words of encouragement.
and Nigel - yeah it was tough climbing up inside that clock and fixing its gears smile
cheers guys
Paul

#1167962 - 08/17/20 01:41 PM Re: Dawn in London Time - collab w/ @HappyDays [Re: PaulCanuck]  
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Paul

I like the production very much!

I kept thinking DAWN IN LONDON TOWN

Maclie

#1168112 - 08/19/20 03:01 PM Re: Dawn in London Time - collab w/ @HappyDays [Re: PaulCanuck]  
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Thanks Mackie - very kind of you. smile

#1168120 - 08/19/20 03:50 PM Re: Dawn in London Time - collab w/ @HappyDays [Re: PaulCanuck]  
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Hey Paul,

I like the melody. Couple of thoughts...

1. In a break-up crumbs is a close word used, but "bread-crumbs" is the full phrase. Getting "Bread-crumbs" really sucks. I would try to use the full word Bread-Crumbs since it is a break up song..


2. Why no other mention of anything "London" for imagery? Especially in your CHORUS....Since you guys mentioned Big Ben (even though silent while under renovation) , how 'bout something like this...

And itís dawn in London time
Big Bens chimes are softly singing
While I'm crying in your night
Youíre wide awake in my evening
Itís dawn in London time





Steve Altonian---"I'll just do my best & let God do the rest"

http://www.stevealtonian.com
#1168316 - 08/23/20 12:01 PM Re: Dawn in London Time - collab w/ @HappyDays [Re: Steve Altonian]  
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Originally Posted by Steve Altonian
Hey Paul,

I like the melody. Couple of thoughts...

1. In a break-up crumbs is a close word used, but "bread-crumbs" is the full phrase. Getting "Bread-crumbs" really sucks. I would try to use the full word Bread-Crumbs since it is a break up song..


2. Why no other mention of anything "London" for imagery? Especially in your CHORUS....Since you guys mentioned Big Ben (even though silent while under renovation) , how 'bout something like this...

And itís dawn in London time
Big Bens chimes are softly singing
While I'm crying in your night
Youíre wide awake in my evening
Itís dawn in London time


Thanks Steve - I'll pass on those comments to Rocky who wrote the lyrics. Glad you liked the melody smile
Paul


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