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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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https://soundcloud.com/wabash-cannibal/robert-george-when-tomorrow-still-believed-in-usWhen Tomorrow Still Believed In UsI was watchin’ our old driveway Beer can on the windowsill Red moon risin’ in the distance And our house was cold and still
I waited 'til past midnight
And I could feel the morning turn to dust
Wedding photos on the wall,
Helped a lonely heart recall
When tomorrow still believed in us
Slipped my future off my finger And dropped it in the empty can Called the local Greyhound depot Grabbed a one-way to Cheyenne Guess I could’ve stayed and argued with you
'bout things we never did discuss
But I’d disappeared by dawn,
Cos I knew the days were gone
When tomorrow still believed in usAnd the things I saved and carried with me
Were things that old driver couldn’t see
They were memories of passion and trust
When tomorrow still believed in us
You were gonna sneak in quiet and then tip-toe up our stairs Then you found a house of shadows And a can beside my chair Friends say you’re lonesome and you’re sorry
But your fickle heart will soon adjust
Then the past will be a haze,
And you won’t relive the days
When tomorrow still believed in usAnd the things that I saved and carried with me
Were things that old driver couldn’t see
They were memories of passion and trust
When tomorrow still believed in us
©2010 Robert George and Cameron Earnshaw
Last edited by couchgrouch; 10/08/20 11:23 AM.
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Frak...it looks like I forgot to post the link. I'll get to it...
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This is all too painfully familiar. I just can't remember which of my wives it was.
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Solid song.
Like this line : And the things I saved and carried with me
Were things that old driver couldn’t see
That's a song in itself, reminds of how you have no idea what's going on in somebody's mind when you see them.
Train and bus drivers pick up strangers with all kinds of histories in their heads.
Might approach that in a new song.
Enjoyed.
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Just some thoughts...  (I pulled into our driveway) (Cold six-pack in the seat) Red moon risin’ in the distance (And I knew just where you'd be) I waited 'til past midnight (Then watched the morning turn to dust) Wedding photos on the wall, Helped a lonely heart recall When tomorrow still believed in us Slipped (our) future off my finger And dropped it in (an) empty can (Said good bye to all our hopes-n-dreams) (And hit the road for Cheyenne) Guess I could’ve stayed and argued (But there was nothing to discuss) (By the time you got home) (The days were already gone) When tomorrow still believed in us The things I saved and carry with me (Remind me of who we used to be) They were memories of passion and trust When tomorrow still believed in us You were gonna sneak in quiet and then tip-toe up our stairs (But) you found a house of shadows And a can beside my chair Friends say you’re so alone and sorry (And you're struggling to adjust) (That house will always haunt you) (My empty chair reminds you) When tomorrow still believed in us
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Thanks everyone. JAPOV, here's a few thoughts. Cold six pack in my seat etc. There's no need to change what I had. Plus, the listener might get the idea of drinking and driving. What I have paints a clear, stark, concise picture. And yours has a bad rhyme. The phrase "hopes n dreams" doesn't need to be in a song ever again. "Struggling to adjust" would be hard to sing. As it's written now, it's singable and the meter's tighter than Joe Biden's face. "House will always haunt you." See comment on hopes n dreams.
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Lol... have a nice day Grouch
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Hey Couch, Great tune, very heartful. Especially like the double lead up to the hook and the bridge is well placed. Slipped my future off my finger.... what a great line. Nice job ! cheers, niteshift
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Thanks niteshift.
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Nicely done. Only thing is the first line threw me off on scene setting. The world 'old' in "watchin' our old driveway" made me think the guy was outside the house and was watching his old house from the street. "red moon rising in the distance" reinforced that as I'm not sure how he'd see a moon rising from inside the house. So I thought the guy was revisiting his old house one last time before leaving. I couldn't figure out if his wife had left or died. I even wondered if it was a ghost story. Only after a full listen and a re-read of the lyrics did I realize he's inside the house, waiting for his wife to show and leaving before she returns.
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Thanks ant.
The beer can on the windowsill should've showed he was inside, by the window, where he could see the driveway and the moon. Plus, the wedding photos on the wall.
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Robert
If I still had money, I give you a 100 dollar TIP!
Many of us have been there
Sounds better than most sad ballads out on thee radio!
Mackie
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Thanks, Mackie.
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