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by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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Weekend Warrior Patricia Baker/Noel Downs Copyright2004 As zero hour approaches Sat’day slowly rears her head I conduct a final gear check Wishing I was back in bed. I start in the north east corner, Leopard crawl across my grass, On a search-and-destroy mission, I'm on red alert, primed for attack. Chorus There’s weeds of mass dispersion Got to hunt those suckers down, Flail ‘em with weed whackers, Spray chemicals until they drown. Weeds of mass dispersion! WEEKEND WARRIOR'S my name, And I’m soldier for all seasons Cause gardening is not a game! And it’s not just weeds I’m hunting, There’s other nasties too, Sneak up on fireants and aphids, And caterpillar infantry on the move! Won't recognize me in this camo, 'Til my enemy and I are face to face. I love an Apocalyptic view, This backyard's a scary place. Repeat Chorus I should get that laser targeter, That Lowe’s just put on sale, Stock up on extra defoliant, And bio pellets for the snails. Got to buy a thermal tracker, And super jet hose line. This is for the nonbelievers, Stick around, your ass is mine. Bridge {Instrumental, attack/ military battle music} I'm planting nuclear weapons, Under the ornamental ferns, Pull out the Texas firebug, We’ll see how well they burn!
[This message has been edited by Tricia Baker (edited 04-13-2004).]
"Grits is one of those country-boy words that is both singular and plural-like deer, elk and sheep. I think the singular is appropriate when there's a modifier that makes it clear one is talking about something specific. Like, 'Grits are good for you, but these here grits is tasty.'"~~Joe Wrabek
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great laughs in this one.
Spandex is still in use? (LOL)
I endeavor to change one heart and one mind, one word at a time.
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Mornin' Tricia,
This one gets better with every re-write.
In keeping with your title I wanted to see maybe "camo-spandex" pants.<g>
The final couplet in verse one might read easier if you changed the order
"on a search-and-destroy mission, red alert ... primed to attack."
Nice job.
dawg
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Now THIS is what I personally had in mind to support the title/theme. You done dug deeper . My only comment is that V2/L4-8... "I reach back and check the spandex, That's keeping my butt in place, It’s in full view of the neighbours, And a passing cycle race." Seems out-of-place compared to what you have going everywhere else. I can see you want to keep the spandex reference, but I think dawg has a good idea -- "camo-spandex" -- if you want to keep it and work the remaining lines to support it better. To me, the "in view of the neighbors" and "cycle race" ideas don't work. All JMO. Nice to see this one evolve so well. Tom
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Hi Dawg, Tom and Quality! Yep. I'm thinking the spandex needs out of there. I just emailed Noel about it. I've been busy today and now I'm trying to get caught up. Thanks for the feedback. Noel is awesome! I'm so pleased to be working with him on this one. I'm pleased to be working with him PERIOD!
"Grits is one of those country-boy words that is both singular and plural-like deer, elk and sheep. I think the singular is appropriate when there's a modifier that makes it clear one is talking about something specific. Like, 'Grits are good for you, but these here grits is tasty.'"~~Joe Wrabek
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Verse 1 and 2 changes.
"Grits is one of those country-boy words that is both singular and plural-like deer, elk and sheep. I think the singular is appropriate when there's a modifier that makes it clear one is talking about something specific. Like, 'Grits are good for you, but these here grits is tasty.'"~~Joe Wrabek
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I kike the spandex, gives this a personal feel it would otherwise be missing great job you guys!!!!!!! ------------------ http://www.ampcast.com/music/26305/artist.php
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bigggg difference from the original posting Tricia? I guess this way the lyric is living up to the Warrior part of the title. Love these lines
I start in the north east corner, Leopard crawl across my grass,
This is for the nonbelievers, Stick around, your ass is mine.
The spandex lines are good but don't think they belong in there...doesn't fit the rest of the lyric in my opinion. You had too much fun with this one.
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I think this is great. I guess I missed the original version, but I think it's good like this. I need one of them weekend warriors to drop by my place for a while. My yard could certainly benefit from someone more serious about it than I am. Only thing that didn't sit quite right with me was: "I love an Apocalyptic view, This backyard's a scary place" Not sure why someone would love an Apocalyptic view, especially when they go on to say it's scary. I'm not too fond of most things I find scary. I know it's meant as humor, but didn't sound quite right to me. Other than that very minor nit, can't see anything here worth changing. Very good job, you two. Randy ------------------ http://www.songramp.com/homepage.ez?Who=RandyB
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Thanks Randy, Ritt and Linda. This one will shape up very nicely. I like what Noel's done to this one. The only line I think I'd change is Weekend Warrior's My Name. But, that's no biggie.
"Grits is one of those country-boy words that is both singular and plural-like deer, elk and sheep. I think the singular is appropriate when there's a modifier that makes it clear one is talking about something specific. Like, 'Grits are good for you, but these here grits is tasty.'"~~Joe Wrabek
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Hi Tricia and Noel,
This is some scary stuff. I'm glad I'm not a bug.
Mel
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