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FEMALE SINGER

Should I Be Ashamed
© Ben Burton MARCH 123, 2008

V1
You won't wear my affection
If there's a chance someone will see
I wait outside those moments
Avoiding that reality
V2
Though truth is a perception
Bound to insecurities
Your guarded mixed emotions
Are now becoming plain to me
CHORUS
Should I be ashamed
Of what they think is clear
How can I be blamed
For something I don't hear
Should I be ashamed
V3
First time I've competed
With what is so hard to define
Sometimes the words you're saying
Don't match what I see in your eyes

Should I be ashamed
Of what they think is clear
How can I be blamed
For something I don't hear
Should I be ashamed
BRIDGE
As soon as you give back
The best of what I feel for you
That's when we'll make a pact
No need for telling others that "we do"

Should I be ashamed
Of what they think is clear
How can I be blamed
For something I don't hear
Should I be ashamed
TAG
Should I be ashamed
That I prefer you near

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Howdy Ben,
Only one line gave me trouble. "Could be a shameless wast of time" The flow went well , just lost me in the meaning. I was going to sugg up something clever and realized the whole v3 seems to need a revamp.
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Psssssttttt...hey, Pete. Com'ere. Don't tell nobody about this. I probably should be ashamed for writing it. Even had a tune for it, but prolly stole it from som'eres. Though I did revamp that verse...so thanks. smile

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Hey Ben

Good lyric here. Although I am a little confused as to exactly what she mean (maybe that's the point) if so you did too good a job friend lol. Is she talking about what I think she's talking about? wink
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Derek,

I guess this one is semi-autobiographical. In the day (post college), I was uncomfortable with girls who tried to show too much affection, feeling that I would be forced into a position of looking like the bad guy when we split, which was usually inevitable, since I could tell pretty quickly if permanency was in the air, though that didn't preclude our getting physical.

The "shame" is meant to be nebulous, although I actually mean it as the girl wondering if she should be, while turning a deaf ear (LITERALLY) on those who try to tell her not to get so involved. I KNOW this happens all the time, but, apparently, the way I've tried to describe it here isn't grabbing anyone. Oh well, que sera.

Thank you, Derek.

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Hi Ben good write. I by far prefer this to ten thousand. Well what do you know I was way off beam with the meaning behind this one.
I took it for a woman carrying on with a married man. Always in the background, always waiting, never shown off to others, feeling guilty, full of doubts and never admitting to others the relationship. Shows how my mind works and how wrong I can be. My scenario fits better than an uncomfortable guy or a guy who is ashamed of his girlfriend. Well that is my excuses and I am sticking to them.

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Jim,

Thanks for the post. You must be a "round the clock" kinda dude over in jolly ol' Scotland! lol

No, don't think that. That is PRECISELY one of the alternative interpretations I expected. As well as the one where the gal is wondering (antiquated though it seems in today's world) if she should be ashamed because of the sex, when deep down she knows his feelings are uncertain, at best. I think multiple interpretations in a song of this ilk are preferable.

I'll be honest. I think this is better than most of what I write. Maybe...oh, it doesn't matter. Glad you liked!

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Benaby,

I personally don't think this is better than most of what you write...JMHO mind you. However, I DO like the enigmatic quality of it. I too thought it was an affair situation upon first read. I have to jet right now or I'd go into more detail on my "thoughts"...lol. But...my oldest has to have his foot x-rayed. Gotta love soccer & those cleats!

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Hi Ben.... smile smile this is the 2nd time this week I've seen a lyric..where I'd love to see a 2nd version... done up where a teen is wondering about her choices and decisions.

I think this is the couplet that got me thinking that way....

Sometimes the words you're saying
Don't match what I see in your eyes

where a young girl is feeling pressured...and wants to please..
but wants to say No too....

Unlike my friend Jim....I like 10,000 better!!... You write lyrics that appeal to many... differently.... smile :)and THAT is a good thing smile to have going on....

very best to you this mornin' Ben....
Hope all is well down 'bama way.....
kk smile





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Ben,
Nice revamp , even better than I coulda done , bein' rusty for the time-being...
Like it !
Pete


Here we are wracking our brains today
to write lyrics that rhyme
and if we succeed, they'll end up in time
as tommorrow's cliche's...
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