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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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I resently auditioned for our church worship team band and was chosen as their guitarist. In lue here is a lyric of a more contemporary pop rock style. I'm out on a limb here and figure this might be one for the old shoe box! What do you think? I CAN’T LIVE WITHOUT YOU © TEDDIE COCHRAN I live my life each day praising your glory Nurturing my faith with every seed I place I watch seedling grow with your love to cultivate I’ve witnessed what flowers with just a little hate I’ve seen a punished nation where evils taken root I’ve seen the demons cower with your spoken word I’ve seen the joy a little hope can make Oh Lord, I can’t live without you I wanna live in your glory I wanna feel your touch upon my face I wanna feel your mighty power Running through my veins Rejuvenate my soul with every breath I take I can’t do this alone I need you each step that I make Oh Lord, I can’t live without you I feel the change each act of kindness makes I’ve seen the glimpse of a better place I wanna live in your glory I wanna feel your touch upon my face I wanna feel your mighty power Running through my veins Rejuvenate my soul with every breath I take I can’t do this alone I need you each step that I make Oh Lord, I can’t live without you I don’t wanna live without you Oh Lord, I can’t live without you I wanna live in your glory I wanna feel your touch upon my face I wanna feel your mighty power Running through my veins Oh Lord, I can’t do this alone Rejuvenate my soul I can’t live without you Best Regards, Teddie Cochran www.teddiecochran-music.com
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in the first verse last line
i've whitnessed what flowers with just a little hate
i think your missing something try reading it again maybe it's a type er I don't know but don't understand it.
Have fun on the journey, love the moment, but go for the ride- Laura Lynn Hatch
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Ridenrose, I think "flowers" is the verb in that line.
Teddie, very nice for a particular market.
Have fun, John
Whoever said the pen is mightier than the sword never had an editor.
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Why no rhymes here? Unless you count "root/you"?
I’ve seen a punished nation where evils taken root I’ve seen the demons cower with your spoken word I’ve seen the joy a little hope can make Oh Lord, I can’t live without you
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I just haven't found an appropraite rhyme there yet Shayne. You're right John "Flowers" is the verb there. This has been somewhat of a challenge as this style is not one I know a lot about. I've studied the form but never tried writing in it. Thanks for your responses.
Teddie
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