Leaving Daddy - 12/04/19 03:25 PM
EDIT - Revised version is up at link based on your thoughts.
Good day to you JPF folks. This is a tune that is in the home stretch for a disk that is forthcoming from my band (Blackfoot Daisy). It is about three generations of women caught in the cycle of domestic violence. We have been performing this song live for about three years now and it was difficult to capture the energy of the live version but I think 'musically' we have done this on the recording.
I mention this because I am not looking for feedback on the lyric or the song itself. It's basically a "done deal."
My issue is the vocal. I am considering redoing it. I don't know if it's my voice, the performance, or the mix but I just can't seem to settle with it. Can a few of you listen and give me some feedback? Maybe it's my phrasing? I am at a loss.
Also, if you do have any thoughts on the musical elements re: mix, etc., those are appreciated as well.
Thanks so much and I will be back to listen/provide feedback for others.
https://soundcloud.com/mamby-p/leaving-daddyspec1/s-W0u8h
Leaving Daddy (DuMond/Sechelski)
When she was nine
He pushed her down
Pulled her hair out
By the crown
She just cried
And mama lied
About leaving daddy
When she was ten
They moved back in
Swore he'd never
Do it again
She just cried
And mama lied
About leaving daddy
Daddy fought and he drank
Ran from the law
Ran from the bank
She just cried
And mama lied
About leaving daddy
Then she grew up
And found a man
He was mean
Didn't give a damn
Her baby cried
And she just lied
About leaving daddy
Now she drinks
And she cuts
She's got scars
But she's got no guts
She just dreams
of bigger things
And leaving daddy
Her little girl
Is alone in her room
loading a gun
Cause he's coming soon
She just cries
And mama lies
About leaving daddy
She just cries
And her mama lies
About leaving daddy x 2
Good day to you JPF folks. This is a tune that is in the home stretch for a disk that is forthcoming from my band (Blackfoot Daisy). It is about three generations of women caught in the cycle of domestic violence. We have been performing this song live for about three years now and it was difficult to capture the energy of the live version but I think 'musically' we have done this on the recording.
I mention this because I am not looking for feedback on the lyric or the song itself. It's basically a "done deal."
My issue is the vocal. I am considering redoing it. I don't know if it's my voice, the performance, or the mix but I just can't seem to settle with it. Can a few of you listen and give me some feedback? Maybe it's my phrasing? I am at a loss.
Also, if you do have any thoughts on the musical elements re: mix, etc., those are appreciated as well.
Thanks so much and I will be back to listen/provide feedback for others.
https:/
Leaving Daddy (DuMond/Sechelski)
When she was nine
He pushed her down
Pulled her hair out
By the crown
She just cried
And mama lied
About leaving daddy
When she was ten
They moved back in
Swore he'd never
Do it again
She just cried
And mama lied
About leaving daddy
Daddy fought and he drank
Ran from the law
Ran from the bank
She just cried
And mama lied
About leaving daddy
Then she grew up
And found a man
He was mean
Didn't give a damn
Her baby cried
And she just lied
About leaving daddy
Now she drinks
And she cuts
She's got scars
But she's got no guts
She just dreams
of bigger things
And leaving daddy
Her little girl
Is alone in her room
loading a gun
Cause he's coming soon
She just cries
And mama lies
About leaving daddy
She just cries
And her mama lies
About leaving daddy x 2