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The perfect Girl Verse You’ve been searching for the perfect girl. You’ve been overlooking pearls. You’ve been looking but you’re not finding The one who will change your world. Chorus Oh you can want what you want But boy you ain’t no prize. The perfect girl for you is Right there before your eyes. Verse Don’t have blue eyes like you imagined. But she’ll make you feel alive. She’ll make you laugh as if by magic. But the truth you still deny. Chorus Oh you can want what you want But boy you ain’t no prize. The perfect girl for you is Right there before your eyes. Bridge You went searching for a diamond Found yourself a peal. Maybe it’s time you realized. She’s the perfect girl. Chorus Oh you can want what you want But boy you ain’t no prize. The perfect girl for you is Right there before your eyes.
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Enjoyed it ck. Flows nicely. Another to your list.
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Good lyrics but... in a bridge, it is strongly recommended to NOT use the title of the song.
I think that you should rewrite the bridge.
Have fun!
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The perfect girl (or guy) is often a very elusive find. Was for the most part never really easy for me, but looking back now I realize that at the time I probably was pushing too hard, trying to make up for lost time. I grew up in boarding school and didn't have my first real date until I was 26. Had chances but by that time I was taken in by the freewheeling single lifestyle. Currently I have had one primary girlfriend for the last several years but only get together average every couple of weeks because these days it's just too expensive to go out continuously even though I haven't totally lost interest in that lifestyle; just not possible today. And I believe, contrary to what some will say, that the advent of the Internet has actually made it harder, not easier, to meet others. Maybe the solitary life isn't so bad after all, as in this song which put Neil Diamond on the musical map. https://www.youtube.com/results?search_query=solitary+man+neil+diamond
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Great song! I think too many people miss out on opportunites to find happiness by chasing unrealistic ideals.
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Hi CK, You don't know me but I have this thing about syllables. This idea has been done a number of times and is worth redoing a number more because it's a good hook. a few suggestions. keep or sweep.
You’ve been searching for the perfect girl. You’ve been overlooking (Many) pearls. You’ve been looking but you’re (never) finding The one who will change your world. Chorus Oh you can want (Just) what you want But boy you ain’t no prize. The perfect girl for you is Right there before your eyes. Verse Don’t have eyes (The color) you imagined. But she’ll make you feel (So) alive. She’ll make you laugh as if by magic. But the truth you still (try to) deny. Chorus Oh you can want what you want But boy you ain’t no prize. The perfect girl for you is Right there before your eyes. Bridge You went searching for a diamond Found yourself a peal. Maybe it’s time you realized. She’s the perfect girl. Chorus Oh you can want what you want But boy you ain’t no prize. The perfect girl for you is Right there before your eyes.
And agree, no hook in the bridge.
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Yes flows better with your additions. Thanks.
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