I like the melody and the conversational lyric. It took me a minute to figure-out the hook. Initially, I thought the "you" was a woman he was singing about and that basically she was moving slowly toward him, hence the "other women" were walking by faster and faster..and he was noticing them less. Then I realized he was referring to himself. Duh..

So I'm wondering if it should not be "the slower I get?" Or perhaps I'm the dumbest person alive and am the only person who did not figure this out. That's entirely possible!

Overall, I thought this was very good. I hear you totally on the recording stuff. I have very little time and money too and it requires both to really get great sounding audio, if you want more than a simple guitar/vox. I would suggest a guitar or piano/vox only for this anyway because it's very strong and I tend to enjoy these "slice of life" songs that way. I guess that's just a personal thing but I think maybe it has more emotional impact for me.

Good luck on the song quest.

https://open.spotify.com/artist/2YHxGUvESQz2KVWX7tGfLo?si=j7Uu4cSLRLmwhBBn75e68g

https://open.spotify.com/artist/5wYxBeX6HkRciSVwmn9bdr?si=UmPlCB5gS0SHRie8_wXo5A