Originally Posted by Little_stevie_b
Well, Well, Well. My first song of 2017. This one started out one way, took a right turn down a rabbit hole, coming out the other side with a whole different theme...I thought I wanted to write about one thing but the song didn't want to go there and I ended up with an ode to my tiny hometown in Kentucky. The vocal isn't what I'd like it to be as I've been getting over a cold and the voice is uncontrollable. For those of you who remember the Green Acres TV show back in the 60s I sound like Mr. Haney going through puberty. Still up to some lyrical changes in places but the rhythm section is done.

I Need A Town Like You
© 2017 Steven M. Biederman

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There's a little house back near a cul-de-sac
Where I'd wait for the bus when the morning was still black
Well it's been a long while since I've been back
But it's something I gotta do
There's a river that cuts through a flood plain there
Every 50 years it rises and the people get scared
All the steel went to Asia and the jobs got scarce
The blast furnace powered down too

[Pre-Chorus]
When I went off to college I didn't look back
If I did it would be too soon
Well the piper played
And I didn't dance to that tune

[Chorus]
Its 40 years later and there's still no jobs
And I wonder what those people do
I didn't want to end up like Randy and Bob
Didn't need a tiny town like you

I had a lot big plans to make money by the sack
And I bragged a lot about them, and you never turned your back
You were always still there when I got off track
I guess I spoke too soon
When I scoffed at your people of faith, I sealed my fate
Dad always sent me money, I was always on the take
Though I never thought of him as a mental heavyweight
But I guess I was wrong there too

[Pre-Chorus]
When I went off to college I didn't look back
If I did it would be too soon
Well the piper played
And I didn't dance to that tune

[Chorus]
Its been over 20 years since I saw Dad last
I lived too far away and he died too fast
And I can't do a thing to get my childhood back
Didn't need a tiny town like you

[Bridge]
Now our kids are grown and we're on our own
I did the best I could do
Now of all of their pleasures and all of their treasures
They want to go back to you

[Chorus]
Its been over 20 years since I saw you last
This time I'm not passing through
Wish that I could take back what I said in the past
I need a tiny town like you

[Repeat Chorus]

[Tag]
I need a tiny town like you
I need a tiny town like you


I would change the word "house" to the word "shack" in the first line.
A couple of the lines seemed awkward, like there were too many syllables for your meter, but that kind of thing is easy enough to fix.
I think since your chorus changes, your title should be "A Tiny Town Like You", because in the beginning of the song you're saying you don't need it, which is the opposite of what your title is saying.
Are you singing to the town, or about the town?