Originally Posted by E Swartz
Hey Tom,

I always enjoy listening to your songs for sure. I like the vocals a lot, a nice edgy vibe with lyrics to match. Acoustic guitar a nice background, but would love to hear this song with a full production--you have a Melencamp vibe going IMO. Lyrically, I like the verses & chorus as stand alone, but maybe either more story could support/connect the title/chorus theme better. (Do you want the meaning in the chorus line to be "you will see" future tense? If not, just say "you see)."

It sounds to me like your are saying, that she is breaking your heart in vs 1, but then you express in the chorus that "you,re" no angel either, and reiterate it in vs 2. But then in vs 3, it goes back to her being the dishonest one in the relationship--so maybe they "deserve" each other? At least that is what my first impression I am ascertaining. Given the chorus lyrics as written as you being no angel, it would seem to me that she should contrast that behavior. If not, then perhaps have the 2nd chorus say: "You're no angel" which then the chorus would now represent both being no angel. Just an idea, and I'm perhaps making more out of the message than needed. Just a couple of ideas to ponder--keep/sweep/modify!

This is really a great start and a song with real potential Tom! No question you are a talent Tom--great write.

steady-eddie



Hey there Eddie....thanks for commenting!!......I think the hero of this lyric is just a guy who seems like a push-over....until you cross him, that is! I think he just has a liking towards the wrong kind of women ;-)

And yea........I hear a bigger and more electric version, as well ;-)
Thanks, again
-Tom