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Lot Long
by Gary E. Andrews - 11/10/26 11:20 AM
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Joined: Dec 2006
Posts: 8,122 Likes: 69
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Top 25 Poster
Joined: Dec 2006
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Great production, guitar work. Some good Structural timing, short Introductory Movement, hit THE Hook within first 60 seconds, memorable contrast between Verse and Chorus. Your title, THE Hook, the main idea of a Song, is misplaced, or simply not supported by Structural Repetition. The other Lines in your Chorus are obscure, abstract ideas that aren't clearly enunciated when I hear them, and hard to comprehend as I read them as being meaningful to the "Reborn To Run" concept. A Repeat of the "Reborn To Run" Line to end the Chorus could be very effective. That would give you two 'hits' on THE Hook per giving of the Chorus. Reading, there's some confusion of the 'I', First-Person Singer-Character, and the 'he', a reference to someone else by that Singer-Character as being the one who is 'reborn'.
There will always be another song to be written. Someone will write it. Why not you? www.garyeandrews.com
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