Hi, John. I was iffy on that line myself, so I changed it slightly. Whenever you do that, you can always see the stitches, but I think it'll be ok for first time readers.

over the last ten years or so, I've moved slowly toward lyrics that have a memorable title, maybe one thought-provoking idea but are metered and structured for singing. I dropped lines from this that were "deeper" for singability.

When I started paying attention to meter/structure nearly 20 years ago, my stuff became less interesting to read, but my demos got way better.

ps...I have worked on making the rhymes more interesting....

Last edited by couchgrouch; 03/12/25 07:45 PM.

Nashville demos etc:

https://www.soundclick.com/bands3/default.cfm?bandID=431939

other demos:

https://soundcloud.com/wabash-cannibal

Amazon Kindle books by Robert George you may enjoy:

1) Americana

2) Teenage Graceland

3) The Will to Be

4) Fort Mystery

5) Wheel Sea

6) My One True Love