Originally Posted by Fdemetrio
Thanks, its about the isolation you feel working in a building where everybody else is gone. Kinda feel left out. I wrote this while working, a contract night job. I'd go home at 6 am.

Had an office window where I could see the sky change as hours passed. Was blue when i was getting there, then turns black, then wee hours of morning turns gray before it becomes blue again.

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To my view,

Your explanation of the contemplative nature of the isolation was interesting. And more interesting than the song itself.

The "lullabye" music was appropriate enough regarding a song that is about night and isolation, but dragged to my ear, sounded dated and the vocal was not pleasing to my ear.

I think that the subject matter would make a better poem, where no music would give any cues to the listener, only the words sounding in the reader's imagination. The theme and it's content would thereby be and feel more "isolated." I'm doing so, it would echo the experience for the reader.

The song also looks like purely personal introspection and "self-therapy."
Which is fine, IMO, people who like to write and do it for years, do it first-off for the peace, fulfillment, etc, etc.

Relate-ability with this particular circumstance is low, yet relate-ability with the theme of alone-ness could be high.

If you want more people to relate to this, I suggest, isolating the emotions felt and applying them to some more universal circumstance.

https://soundcloud.com/sunset-poet-of-texas