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Hey Cal,

Just doing a quick read on these...but I had to tell you again you inspired me (without even knowing it)....you'll have to wait for the details....it's a half-written song, will try to get to it....

As for this song, sad. And I liked that I didn't get it right away. Given that, I wonder if you might mix the last lines of verse one (and leave it as is in the last verse)...maybe:

The letter I read was red
The words were all so bold
The ink she used was pink
BUT STILL THEY LEFT ME COLD

Maybe this gives too much away, I dunno. Aside from the obvious meaning, I also liked the idea of suggesting RED --usually associated with warmth--could make you feel cold.

Otherwise, liked it a lot -- it's a good change of pace. That's one of the reasons I so enjoy these challenges....they take you places you might otherwise never visit.

So ciao for now,
Beth