Hi Keith. You win the LET ME READ ONE LAST LYRIC BEFORE I GO TO BED award. Wow, I'm glad I took the time! This is absolutely brilliant, and I don't think it's just my tired bleary eyes talking. grin

From start to finish, this one really had me hooked. The language, the meter, the imagery, all worked beautifully. And I think your title/hook is a very clever play on words.

Others may find things to nit, but I think they'll be hard pressed to do so. Please let us know when this has music you're satisifed with. I'd love to hear it.

Nice writing!

Greg


If you don't eat your meat, you can't have any pudding.