The song played fine for me on Soundclick.

A well-written song with a good melody. Your voice and treatment are very good but I was hearing this with a full production and I think that would bring out the best in the song.

You might want to check your spelling if you decide to pitch the lyrics.

Good job.

Colin

I try to critique as if you mean business.....

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