Larry,

what do you think of this little adjustment?

the cougar lies in wait
the years have made her sly
patiently she'll watch her prey
from the corner of her eye
a young man's fire is what she craves
she'll quench it if she can
it's a trial of temptation
'til she has him in hand

okay I know I shouldn't make specific suggestions like that. I just couldn't help but think of personalizing that 1st verse.

just having fun,
John


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