MFB,

First of all....Brian should know that you have gone out of your way to critique other people's lyrics....in my own experience - PMing me to ask where you could find a song of mine to critique and then pulling it from page 2 to reciprocate. You have been very conscious of that and it is very much appreciated. Now to the critique...lol.

This surely captures the atmosphere of Fall with all the sounds that are included in the lines. And though they are sounds you're describing, it’s all very visual as well. Nice flow to it too. Would be fun to hear it!

Good work!

Kristi

A musician must make music, an artist must paint, a poet must write,
if he is to be ultimately at peace with himself. What a man can be,
he must be. -- Abraham Maslow, American Psychologist