Hi John,

I think that your two verses are much smoother and I've used them all in a rewrite! I do miss the "pastries can't be fun" line, but maybe I can fit it into a bridge or something...

Too bad I didn't have your changes the other day when I sent the lyric to a Maryland senator who's trying valiantly to legislate against stupidity of this magnitude! I just sent it to him for giggles. I don't know how successful he's going to be with his legislation, though. If the legislation says that Pop Tart guns are acceptable, then some poor kid will be suspended for thinking about a croissant gun!

Thanks for your great changes!

Lisa