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I have not posted anything for quite some time, so thought I would post this odd little tune I just finished. This is really kind of an experiment. I gotta fix the vocal. Small break in my voice on one of the low notes. That's my kid in there too..making noise. It might not be for everybody. Just wondering is it cool, hateful, horrible..etc. I hoping for strange and perhaps cool but it might be strange and hateful..the ears and brain are tired past 11 p.m.

TW 9

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by Wendy DuMond

Tom Waits...
The mules are at your gate
They say that you're running late
And they're feeling low
Tom Waits..
You know death is a blue-eyed boy
And Godzilla was just a toy
He's on the radio
Over there in Tokyo..
Tokyo

Tom Waits...
God has closed-up his shop
He says the world will stop
At a quarter till three
Tom, wait...
I hear the devil calling
He says the world is falling
He says he's wanting to be free

(Chorus)
In a diner at midnight
Cold meat waits in the freezer
And a man is frying greasy eggs
For the regular old geezer

Wait here...
Now that you have no fear
There's no need to worry
About what's going down
Stay clear..
Stay clear of the falling rocks
There's boulders here these docks
They don't make a sound
Ripping holes in your dressing gown

(Chorus)
Across the street at the piano bar
Fat fingers is on his knees
Somebody busted his face again
Old crows are pecking on his keys

Pecking on his keys..
There on the warm breeze
Nobody says please
Nobody says grace
Like Tom Waits..
Like Tom Waits..

Hi Wendy,

This was entertaining, nice melody and cool.
I especially liked this....

Across the street at the piano bar
Fat fingers is on his knees
Somebody busted his face again
Old crows are pecking on his keys

....and I think Scout nailed her part :-)

Calvin

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

I really like it Wendy,

I agree with Calvin, that verse really captures a visual of Tom Waits and I love the double meaning written into the verse of "Tom...waits..".

I think there are lots of stuff folks can read into this lyric, for me, and it may have not been intended at all...the title...TW9 reminded me of OL' 55, which was covered by Gov't Mule...."mules at your gate"....LOL, that was just my own mind in there.

I love hearing your daughter in there...I think in a way that you do too....we want that perfect recording and this reminds us mom's that without our children circling around and adding that spark, we probably wouldn't have found the music anyway...

Good stuff mommy.

Tammy

Hi Wendy,

Definitely very cool... I have wanted to write a song like this ever since I started writing. Puts me in mind of Leonard Cohen -1971, McCabe and Mrs. Miller. Good ol' Tom... He must have written the worst sounding song ever recorded in "The Piano has been Drinking"

Very cool song. I cant wait to hear the finished version!!

Best Days,
Bryan

Hi Wendy,

I was hoping to hear a re-do of TW9. I really enjoyed this rough cut as well as your other songs on SoundClick. I don't know exactly what it is about your sound, but it takes me somewhere contented and yet invokes feelings of restlessness in a way that stimulates deep thought.

Thanks for inspiring.

Best Days,
Bryan

OK, if it is 11pm then the kid needs to be in bed -- ha, ha.

Cool song as usual, your voice is sounding better and better to me (I guess you are performing these days -- that practice must be helping!).

I think you are a mighty fine writer and performer.

Wendy, this is a very nice song and your lyric is very original!! I enjoyed it!! :)))) scotty

Thanks so much guys. I've been meaning to get back to JPF, listen to songs, do crits, and respond to the posts here. I've been performing quite a bit over the past two weeks, plus dealing with kids, etc. and have not been able to sit down on my laptop to do this. But I thank you so much for listening.

BK, my music partner said the same thing about this song..that it sounds like a Leonard Cohen tune. I'm a huge fan of both Mr. Waits and Mr. Cohen, so that makes perfect sense. I am more of an alt folkie too by virtue of not having the chops to write stuff like Tom, who would do this a bit more jazzy, I think. As for revising this, that might take some time. I am very slow about recording stuff. It is a "once in a year" kind of thing for me these days. My band is trying to do some stuff too and I am holding everybody up because getting me to record stuff is like giving a gator a root canal.

Thanks for listening to my other stuff on Soundclick. I did an EP called The Scarlet Letter that is on CD Baby and you can also find my band, Blackfoot Daisy on Reverbnation. The band does more Avett Brothers, Shovels and Rope, Civil Wars type stuff. We have a ton of songs that we need to record.

Tammy - I have heard of Gov't Mule but never listened to them. I was thinking of Tom's album "Mule Variations" when I put that line in the lyric. That's cool that you also got some Tom from the title too. The title was an accident. I just mixed this so many times I lost count and called it TW9, after I saved it so many times.

I think E Schwartz posted too about adding sound effects. That was my idea initially before I used my kid. I found a site where you can download samples. They had a mule train, godzilla noise, piano noise, etc. I may eventually do that, if-when I get around to redoing it.

Kevin, my kid was up when I did the guitar track. She was in bed long before I sang the song.. The issue was latency, popping and the device driver. I don't have a very stable set-up and I kept having to reset that stuff. It was quite maddening.

OK - I need to get to work. Thanks again, folks.