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Hi guys- This is a new one between Dave and myself. It features Cassidy Feasby on vocals, and Dan Hochhalter on banjo and fiddle from Dierks Bentley's band. Thanks to Dave Becker for the great lyrics and trusting me with his baby. I loved making this song.

https://soundcloud.com/bobby-earl-ray-1/shotgun-justice



VERSE 1

I'm on the run
I've got my gun

It's the only thing that I trust
To get the job done

I'm all alone
I'm on my own

Ten bucks in my pocket
Some change and a dingy old comb



CHORUS

They can steal my life
Then watch me bleed

Take my money
Rip the soul out of me

The judge said son
That's the way it must be

Shotgun Justice burns in me








VERSE 2

A shotgun blast
To cleanse the past

You right a wrong
Into the darkness you're cast

You lie in wait
Until the job gets done

Take out two lives
Now you're on the run

PRE-CHORUS

First they took my home
Then he took my wife

I see them with the kids

On a Saturday night



CHORUS

They can steal my life
Then watch me bleed

Take my money
Rip the soul out of me

The judge said son
That's the way it must be

Shotgun Justice burns in me

SOLO…………………………………………….


BRIDGE (SAME MELODY AS CHORUS)

I had them in my sight
I wanted them to see

What their lies
Had done to me

So with the barrel pointed
At my head

Bang Bang baby, now I'm dead




VERSE 3

It's judgment day
What can I say

I beg for his grace
In shame and disgrace

Absolution
It's way too late

I plead my case
And await my fate

YOU-ALL--

WESTERN MOVIE MATERIAL, RIGHT OUT OF THE SHUTE--HAD TO LISTEN SEVERAL TIMES TO GIVE IT 5 STARS--ENCORE WESTERNS NEED THIS ONE!

I LOVE IT--

GOOD LUCK!

Mackie

Bingo...............!

steady-eddie.

First rate all the way and in every way. Fantastic lyric, Dave. You guys did a great job both musically and lyrically. It rings so true.

Stevie

Hey Mackie- thanks so much man. I truly appreciate the kindness you show to myself and so many others on here. This will be the last song I'll be putting out for a while. My wife and I are moving south , so I'm packing up the studio and getting ready. I'm looking forward to meeting you. I'll be using Cassidy and Dan on some of my own songs coming up. You helped me get the ball rolling on collaborations, and I will always be indebted for the opportunity you gave me. Thanks for listening brother Mackie!!!!!!!!- Bobby

Top notch stuff you two...great write, performance and production! Doug

Shotgun Justice was the first demo I ever posted on the JPF mp3 forum. It was the first song I posted as it remains my personal favorite of the songs I have ever written. Bobby has truly taken it up 20 levels or more. I couldn't be happier with what he has done with it. My sincerest thank you to Bobby, Cassidy & Dan for all their efforts. I hope many more are in our future Bobby.

Thank you also Mackie, Ed, Stevie and Doug for the comments and listen. It is much appreciated.

Dave

Dave- There will be many more..... I'm just startin to get the hang of the production part of things. I will get a quality single out there soon.....Hopefully with our names on it........

Hi Bobby and Dave,

WOW -- this sounds amazing and what an exciting lyric with an awesome twist!

Lisa

Hey Eddie- Getting a bingo from you is like hitting the lotto. I tried a couple of different things i the mastering, and I think Cassidy sang the right vocal for the lyric. Dan laid way back, but gave the song the hint of country it needed. I did a lot of swearing trying to lay down the bass on this. I do things without punching in and out, so playing it correctly was a real challenge. Thanks for listening Eddie. I'll get a hold of you once we move-Bobby

I remember the original and just went and listened to it again. This one has more of a polished sound, for sure -- but I can't tell if it is more effective or not in portraying the lyric's message. Overall, I think it is a step up from the original, you all make a good team.

Do me a favor -- go write a happy tune (ha,ha).

Hey Lisa,

Thx for the listen and your kind comments. Much appreciated.

Dave

((( GREAT JOB GUYS )))


Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

A real stunner guys.

Great write Dave, you are do have gift, my friend.

Bobby you guys worked pure magic, with it.

Quality of the production, playing and singing, all top shelf.

Really has a nice swing to it.

A real nice job all ya'll!i enjoyed this one a lot!Mike

Hey Stevie- Thanks for giving a listen. I always am happy to hear your spin on things. Wishing you the best on all your wonderful projects. Thanks Man-Bobby

Bobby, this is a super song but I feel it's missing some things or something? Bring the music up in certain parts, bring the vocal up in others... keep working on it and get it radio ready, you got something here!! :))) scotty

Great song! It has all the makings of the soundtrack for an epic Cowboy movie.
Lovely vocals and guitars, but that synth-guitar in the verse (the one that sounds like an auto-accompaniment part) is somewhat out of place.....like watching a John Wayne move and suddenly he's using a cellphone I think the guitars, fiddle, banjo should just dominate the instrumentation. But that's just nit-picking, the song is excellent!

Hey Calvin- Thanks for stopping by. I'm glad to hear from you. Loved your most recent work with Lisa. You have a lovely format here..... Thanks!

Hey Calvin and Kevin,

Thx much for listening and commenting. As always, it is much appreciated. One of these days I will get you a happy one Kevin.

Dave

Hey Mike- my wife and I will be heading to louisiana for a visit soon. hope maybe we can meet up. thanks for takin the time to listen, and as always, your opinions are always welcomed and embraced. thanks man-bobby

Pro job on this one.
A movie in the making.
Vic

Hey Bobby,

Yeah, real smooth mate. Can't really give any crit, because I think it's all there.

One small nit, the waveform and my ears tell me that the song is just a bit too compressed. I'd back off a bit and let it breathe. That way, the dynamics will present themselves better.

cheers, niteshift

Hey Scotty- Headin your direction soon. I'll be refining the song after I get moved. Normally I listen to all my productions a few months after release to have fresh ears and not to remember every nuance. I'm sure there will be some changes, but I know I'm in the ball park on what we set out to do. I followed Dave's structure except for making the first chorus come up earlier. My job was to get the sound, play the instruments,and find the right vocalist to sing the story in a convincing manner. Hope to see you in Louisiana. We'll be visiting around Alexandria.....are you close to there? Thanks Scotty!-Bobby

Hey Raggy- Love your writing and material. It's funny, but whenever our own ears think we have it right. Each other set of ears hears it different. it's one of the things that makes being on here fun. with each release, i never know what to expect. thank you for writing. best wishes to yo raggy........

Hey Nelson,

Thx for stopping by and listening to the song. Appreciate it much Bobby did a great job with this one and really took it to another level. Thx for listening.

Dave

Nelson- I wanted to also thank you . Your comments were extremely kind. I appreciate your friendship. Have a wonderful Sunday. Thanks Nelson!!!!!

Hey Vic- Thank you for writing. I've already submitted to some music libraries, so Dave and I will keep our fingers crossed and see where it takes us. Thanks for writing, it was very nice to hear from you again.......Bobby

Songs like this make me realize country ain't dead; she's just been recovering from a pretty bad hangover. Love the tune.

Hey Niteshift- Good to hear from you, and thanks for weighing in on this one. Dave and I loved making this, and I know on my part I hope this is the beginning of a strong collaborative effort between the two of us. After I get moved, I'll be cranking them out again. I'll be offering demo service at affordable rates or co writes with people on here. Looking forward to Hazmat's new home........

Hey Michael, Richard and Raggy. Thx for stopping by and giving this a listen. Your comments are much appreciated.

Dave

Sounds Great, Gents!!!

My one fear..on lyrics about Murder or Suicide...is the "Helter-Skelter Effect"... Hope it doesn't leave any Orphans behind..after it's a Hit.

Best Wishes & Big Guys' Hugs,
Stan

Nice story arch and i like the violin, I would prefer more natural sounding and varied percussion, but i like things raw sounding. Those are my thoughts (i am but a baby songwriter)

Rah of Loose Leaf

Hey Black Water Music- Great to meet you on here. If you need any help getting started , drop me a PM. Thanks for your input, I'll be producing a bunch more along this feel for a CD. Thanks Man-Bobby

Wow, I'm loving this, love the music, vocals and the lyric, great job you guys.....I can hear this on the radio.....right now...

glyn

Hey Tampa Stan- We both appreciate your taking the time to stop by for a listen. I loved Dave's lyrics and treatment of a touchy subject. To me, He really brought a great story home. Thanks for your input.......Bobby

Hey Looseleaf- First of all, welcome to the forum, and we all welcome you. Thanks for stopping by, and I am new at collaborating with people. It's good for my skills and imagination to do this, and i was very pleased with Dave and my effort. Thanks for your kindness in posting-Bobby

Hey Vic, Niteshift and Blackwater Music,

Thx so much for your kind comments and the time spent listening. It is much appreciated.

Dave

Hey Kevin- I have my own upbeat song almost ready for release for you. Despite how it may sound lyrically, Dave and I are both happy guys...Lol

Hey Glynda- Very kind of you to stop by. Hope you are doing well. Thanks for your kindness and comments. They are very much appreciated. Have a great weekend-Bobby

Heard it on the radio last night for new music.....Good fun

Great song. The production is very good. My personal opinion is that Nite was being kind as this is very over compressed to my ears. Everything sounds even but lacks a lot of punch. Mix sound weak because of the over compression or limiting.

Everything else sounds great to me otherwise.

Ricky

Hey Ricky-- I'll be re checking the song after I get moved. I tried to get a full, balanced sound. Wasn't that concerned about the dynamics in the song, but still will check again. I enjoyed your most recent song.Thanks for weighing in. For Dave and myself, it was fun to work with a couple pros, and get the best quality my equipment is capable of. Have new songs on the horizon along with some co- writes and composing music for lyricists. Thank You Ricky-Bobby

Aside from the shameless bump on this thread, I did actually have a legitimate question for Bobby and Dave: Now what? Here is what I mean. If we are being honest with ourselves, the majority of JPF posters (myself included) will never produce something of this caliber in our lifetimes. This song is, among so many other things, radio ready. So if you would not mind putting your mentor hats on for a moment, tell us what you plan to do with this song now. We have all read the posts on what NOT to do, but it would be interesting to hear what you guys plan TO do now that you have such a well-produced and well-received demo. To a newbie like myself, I imagine that somewhere in those 1,000 plus views is someone who can take this thing from demo to radio play, but I know this is not likely the case. So please, tell us all what comes next! Hopefully something good...

Hey Chris- First- Thanks for the bump, second...We do have a plan for this. Biggest thing for me is, I must leave where I currently live( Massachusetts). There is no music scene up here. My wife Sissy and I are moving down south shortly. I will be in close enough proximity to be able to take this to Nashville. My wives a great dancer, and we'll hit the Honky Tonks there. I will be sending it to publishers, pluggers, and anyone else I can think of. I will also write to some up and coming artists to try to get them to incorporate it in their set list. For ny younger male Country artist looking for a waylon, or Willie type song, this would fit for them. I'm going to continue to use guys that are touring with National Acts. Biggest thing is to not give up. I've run an add for my demo service, and for the right lyrics, there are plant more songs of this caliber waiting to come out. If you know anyone with good lyrical ability, I know how to bring their song to life. Dave's was very well written, making my job easy. We are hoping to do some more songs together. Being there to shake hands, look people in the eye goes a long way. We'll see how it's received in Nashville. Thanks Chris-Bobby

Hey Chris,

I havn't had much time to check out the boards lately as my wife and I have been traveling and getting some vacation time in, I did want to chime in though and thank you for your comments. As for me, in all honesty I have no clue what to do next with this song. When I wrote it I never envisioned a demo of such professional quality as Bobby has produced. I don't really know anyone in the industry and other than being a music fan, a second rate guitar player for a garage band, and someone that enjoys writing songs, I really don't have a clue as to how any of this works. Frankly, if we can get it to the next level fantastic. On the other hand, I am beyond happy just being a part of a song that I can be proud of.

Dave

Well, to bring this all to a conclusion, I was notified today that Dave and my effort was picked up by Crucial Music. After 3 no's it was a thrill to see that yes. They said they feel very confident about a placement. Congrats to Dave, a true gentleman on here, with a very talented pen. Let's keep our fingers crossed brother.......

Sounds good...when's the video coming out?

Hey Kurt- I'm gonna start working on one shortly. I'm living in Nashville now, and hope we can meet up at some point.......

Hey Guys,

I like it, but for some reason(to MY ears)...the banjo gets in the way and it feels like a pop rock tune wanting to be free (dire straits style)......nicely done.