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by Gary E. Andrews - 07/24/26 08:58 PM
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Hi everyone....it's been a busy year....and very hard to get any of my songs recorded...Here's a 3-piece arrangement that I hope you like....let me know what you think, with any and all impressions. It's what I live for!! (well,almost ;-)) Thanks........... -Tom “Starry-Eyed” By Tom Tognaci http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=12495571She trampled on the moon As her tears fell in its light With eyes shadowed in gloom Oh, how she loathed it’s lonely sight But, how many nights did she plead to that ole moon She lifted her prayers to that gentle face to find her soon But, he never came... She knew nothing about love She was just a lonely girl Who asked that moon above To help her find love in this world Yes, how many nights did she plead to that ole moon She lifted her prayers to that gentle face to find her soon But, he never came... No, he never came... Well, that moon came tumbling down And proposed upon its knees But, the star she thought she found Turned out to be merely cheese But, how many nights did she plead to that ole moon She lifted her prayers to that gentle face to find her soon But, he never came... No, he never came... No, he never came...
Last edited by Cognac; 09/13/13 04:10 AM.
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Hi Tom, WOW..............what a nice song. And a very beautiful performace. Hard for me to believe 28 people have listened to this and didn't have something to say, perhaps you left them speechless ! ps....I like a song with some cheese in it :-) Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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I agree with Calvin! Maybe folks were just half asleep Calvin this time of the day!
Tom, nice write, I got a little "Kansas" feel from this--good melody and music/lyric flow. Interesting lyrics, poetic yet light-hearted a well.
steady-eddie.
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Such a pretty melody Tom and lyric to match. So dreamy!
The emotional pause is perfect.
Really enjoyed it my friend, especially the guitar playing!!
Tammy
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Alright!!!What a beautiful song!I love moon songs.A great performance Tom,loved it all!Mike
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Tom,
A beautiful song with a beautiful lyric - and a wonderful performance.
Here's a thought - and as is often said... just an opinion.
I think the song would be more effective if you swap verses around. One of two ways.
Swap verses 1 and 2.
Or.. even more dramatic...
make verse 2, verse 1
make verse 3, verse 2
make verse 1, verse 3
floyd
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What a beautiful song! Sad but beautiful. Has a really nice folky vibe to it.  Good job!
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Good to see you posting, Tom. Song sounds great. Lyrically, I'm not sure how the star/cheese thing works and the gird/world, love/above verse is a tad chiched. But overall, the song works really well
Bill
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Very nicely done Tom.
One sugg to avoid the moon repetition.
"But, how many nights did she plead, as dreamers do".
Vic
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-Hi Calvin.......thanks for listening and commenting!1 Really....28? That's got to be a record, for a late night post...for me anyways ;-) Thanks again!!
-Thanks Steady-Eddie......Your comment is very much appreciated!!
-Hi Tams!! Your "Bubbly" tune reminds me a bit of this one of mine...folky and fun! I'm glad you like this one of mine...I'm not so sure this one will go over very well ;-)
-Hi Michael....yea! anything with the stars, the moon, or the sun...or any combination of the three...I'm hooked. I'm liking the latest one of yours, by the way!!! Thanks for sharing!
-Tom
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-Hi floyd jane...thanks soooo much for stopping by. I mulled the verse placements over, a bit. I concluded that I prefered to sing the ending, first...then tell the story leading up to the tragic ending! Thanks for noticing!
-Thank you, Cecilee, for your fine comment, and for listening. It's much appreciated!
-Hi Bill....you know me, I can't pass up a well worn cliche, if it fits...I think the spin of the story is what sold me. Always nice to hear from you....and I must say, you have some stellar stuff going on!
-And hi Vic....thanks for the suggestion....and thank you sooo much for giving my little tune a listen! I appreciate it!!!
-Tom
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Hi Tom,
You know, I was asking my moon to bring me a new Tom Tognaci tune -- and my moon sure didn't let me down! I listened and I'm moonstruck!
Lisa
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Hi Tom,
You know, I was asking my moon to bring me a new Tom Tognaci tune -- and my moon sure didn't let me down! I listened and I'm moonstruck!
Lisa Say....you're a pretty good writer yourself! ;-) Thanks Lisa....It's good to hear that my tune didn't leave you with a blue moon! Thanks for listening and commenting! -Tom
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Absolutely beautiful Tom!! Boy you can sure pick guitar with the best!!! Real fine listen. reminded me a bit of some early Kenny Loggins. Great work!!!
doug
Learn all the musical rules inside and out- Then break 'em...
Grace..Peace...Love
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TOM--
This is one of your best--clever lyrics and a beautiful melody! YOU WIN MY 5 STARS!
WRITE AND SING ON--Mackie
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-Hi Doug....any kudos coming from you mean a lot!! Thanks much........ -Tom
-And Hi Mackie....those stars are appreciated....very much!!
Thanks again............. -Tom
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