Forgive Me

Forgive Me #1059054 09/11/14 08:00 AM
Joined: Apr 2010 Posts: 3,411 London, U.K J joewatt OP Top 100 Poster
OP joewatt Top 100 Poster J Joined: Apr 2010 Posts: 3,411 London, U.K	vs I'm sitting here with a hole in my shoe And a faded black and white photo of you Tears streaming down my cheeks All of those years, all of those weeks vs I could have held you in my arms Watched you grow, succumbed to your charms But the drink had me in its grasp From the very fist day to the very last P/C Your mother took you away On that cold cold lonely day I know it was the right thing to do Still it broke my heart in two Chorus: Forgive me for letting you down Forgive me for not being around I've written this letter to you Explaining the things I've been through I hope it reaches you safe You read it before I'm in my grave vs I pray you've not been acting to wild And maybe even have your own child Are settled in your own little home With a cute little dog and a car of your own vs I know that your mom has passed on It was a very sad day when that news came along But I'm begging you for the very first time If you think of me make those thoughts kind Chorus: Forgive me for letting you down Forgive me for not being around I hope that your dreams come true And the good lord looks out for you Maybe at some future date I'll finally see your face Last edited by joewatt; 09/18/14 07:40 AM.

Re: Forgive Me joewatt #1059111 09/11/14 09:33 PM
Joined: Jun 2006 Posts: 7,712 Nashville, Tennessee usa Jim Colyer (D) Top 30 Poster
Jim Colyer (D) Top 30 Poster Joined: Jun 2006 Posts: 7,712 Nashville, Tennessee usa	A real tear jerker! It reminds me of "You Dont't Know Jack" by Luke Bryan. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Wng2ZZQ69c8

Re: Forgive Me joewatt #1059119 09/11/14 11:39 PM
Joined: Mar 2001 Posts: 3,072 Magnolia, Texas, U.S.A. David Fontaine Top 100 Poster
David Fontaine Top 100 Poster Joined: Mar 2001 Posts: 3,072 Magnolia, Texas, U.S.A.	Hey Joe, Wow! You're really on a roll as of late. I think this is my favorite lyric of yours up to this point! I absolutely love it. It's beautiful and very well written. Very touching without being too mushy. Sometimes very hard to do. After the first read I picked up a melody right off the bat. I liked it so much I sang it a couple of times. There's a few very minor meter bumps that are very easy to sing through, so nothing I would call an issue. A couple of typos, but again no big deal. I love this lyric. I wish I had more time on my hands. I'd probably be asking to compose it. Very nice! You should really try to get this one put to music. Excellent! David https://soundcloud.com/d-michael-fontaine

Re: Forgive Me David Fontaine #1059263 09/13/14 06:54 AM
Joined: Jun 2011 Posts: 12,380 Likes: 8 Kendal, Cumbria .UK T Travis david Top 10 Poster
Travis david Top 10 Poster T Joined: Jun 2011 Posts: 12,380 Likes: 8 Kendal, Cumbria .UK	But the booze had me in its GRIP From DAY ONE UNTIL MY last SIP Just a couple of thought Joe. good story as usual! Trav is We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde

Re: Forgive Me Jim Colyer (D) #1059351 09/14/14 07:44 AM
Joined: Apr 2010 Posts: 3,411 London, U.K J joewatt OP Top 100 Poster
OP joewatt Top 100 Poster J Joined: Apr 2010 Posts: 3,411 London, U.K	Hey Jim Thanks It is meant to be a tear jerker. Cheers Joe

Re: Forgive Me David Fontaine #1059352 09/14/14 07:52 AM
Joined: Apr 2010 Posts: 3,411 London, U.K J joewatt OP Top 100 Poster
OP joewatt Top 100 Poster J Joined: Apr 2010 Posts: 3,411 London, U.K	Hey David I'm glad you enjoyed it so much, it's based on a story told to me by a guy I met when I was living on the street. I do have a melody for this(and a simple guitar backing). Cheers Joe

Re: Forgive Me Travis david #1059353 09/14/14 07:54 AM
Joined: Apr 2010 Posts: 3,411 London, U.K J joewatt OP Top 100 Poster
OP joewatt Top 100 Poster J Joined: Apr 2010 Posts: 3,411 London, U.K	Hey Travis I did consider those lines on my first draft, I just didn't like how they sang. Cheers Joe

Re: Forgive Me joewatt #1059389 09/14/14 04:59 PM
Joined: Mar 2001 Posts: 3,072 Magnolia, Texas, U.S.A. David Fontaine Top 100 Poster
David Fontaine Top 100 Poster Joined: Mar 2001 Posts: 3,072 Magnolia, Texas, U.S.A.	Originally Posted by joewatt Hey David I'm glad you enjoyed it so much, it's based on a story told to me by a guy I met when I was living on the street. I do have a melody for this(and a simple guitar backing). Cheers Joe Pretty cool background info. Sounds like you had it pretty tough at times. That's great that you have the melody, and have started the music. I would love to hear this one! David https://soundcloud.com/d-michael-fontaine

Re: Forgive Me David Fontaine #1059407 09/15/14 01:49 AM
Joined: Jun 2013 Posts: 310 Annapolis, MD Chris B. Top 500 Poster
Chris B. Top 500 Poster Joined: Jun 2013 Posts: 310 Annapolis, MD	Like the story, Joe. I look forward to hearing this one play out. Amazing no matter how low life can drag you, there's always someone a little deeper down the hole than you. 73's & 88's Good Buddy! Chris Bohlman

Re: Forgive Me David Fontaine #1059669 09/17/14 07:27 AM
Joined: Apr 2010 Posts: 3,411 London, U.K J joewatt OP Top 100 Poster
OP joewatt Top 100 Poster J Joined: Apr 2010 Posts: 3,411 London, U.K	Hey David I guess we've all had a tough time at some stage in our lives. One day I will post some stuff. Cheers Joe

Re: Forgive Me Chris B. #1059670 09/17/14 07:31 AM
Joined: Apr 2010 Posts: 3,411 London, U.K J joewatt OP Top 100 Poster
OP joewatt Top 100 Poster J Joined: Apr 2010 Posts: 3,411 London, U.K	Hey Chris I'm glad you liked it. It's true what you say even when I was on the street I never felt sorry for myself. There always was someone worse off. Cheers Joe

Re: Forgive Me joewatt #1059746 09/18/14 06:36 AM
Joined: Jun 2013 Posts: 630 Escondido, CA Dave Whitehead Top 500 Poster
Dave Whitehead Top 500 Poster Joined: Jun 2013 Posts: 630 Escondido, CA	Joe, Excellent read. I'd like to hear it as well. One consideration: Explaining the things I've been through Consider swapping out "things" with something more specific. Ex. "Changes" or? Yeah, the song probably reflects an all too frequent situation. Nice one, Dave

Re: Forgive Me Dave Whitehead #1059843 09/19/14 08:05 AM
Joined: Apr 2010 Posts: 3,411 London, U.K J joewatt OP Top 100 Poster
OP joewatt Top 100 Poster J Joined: Apr 2010 Posts: 3,411 London, U.K	Hey Dave Thanks glad you enjoyed it. I'll certainly consider changing the word you suggest. Cheers Joe

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