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by Gary E. Andrews - 07/24/26 08:58 PM
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lazy bones summer day.Thanks to Neil for the bridge
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Fish ain't biting, that's OK I can wait
legs a dangling as I contemplate
That summer sun makes you feel glad you're alive
rarely been a cloud to spoil my big blue sky
v
Old dog snores loudly 'bout all he does
honey bees flying past my head, buzz buzz
Darlin's planning supper based on my big catch
only thing I've managed is a poison ivy rash
c
Busy doing nothing on this lazy bones summer day
radio softly plays summer songs from yesterday.
Not sure what's Groovin' on a Sunday Afternoon?
Guess it's feeling good when everythings in tune?
Could sure get used too these lazy river bank ways
busy doing nothing on this lazy bones summer day
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Might try up river to change my luck
surprise folks at home if i bagged a duck
Even have myself a good old skinny dip
chancing a sore backside so I can't sit
B
From lazy bones to sleepy head,
To I'll give it another try
But thankfully I'll sleep well
With the best catch of my life.
c
Busy doing nothing on this lazy bones summer day
radio softly plays summer songs from yesterday.
Not sure what's Groovin' on a Sunday Afternoon?
Guess it's feeling good when everythings in tune?
Could sure get used too these lazy river bank ways
busy doing nothing on this lazy bones summer day
Doing what I'm good at on lazy bones summer days
Last edited by Travis david; 11/11/14 11:53 AM.
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A real good start, maybe have an "awe isn't that sweet" by having him realize how lucky he is.
B
From lazy bones to sleepy head,
To I'll give it another try
But thankfully I'll sleep well
With the best catch of my life
The chicken trays came out of nowhere....????
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Yeah I like that bridge and have used it Neil, the chickens will have to go
Travis
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I've rewritten the chorus as well as a bridge change
Travis
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Nice Travis...good changes
maybe make it touch more personal ....use first person instead of you...
That summer sun makes me glad I'm alive
also
My iPod softly plays summer songs from yesterday.
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Hey Travis, Awww...isn't that sweet!  I DO like Neil's suggestion for the bridge -- it works really well, especially since you set us up that his darling's around! Real sweet write! Lisa
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OK Neil sent you a reply
Travis
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Thanks Lisa, Neil is working on the music and the demo sounds good.Thanks for your visit
Travis
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Hi Travis,
I like Neils suggestions too,
And love the hook!
Geneva
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Howdy Travis, looks like you're well on the way with lots of help
on another good one......Gus
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Hi Geneva
Thanks pleased you like this one
Travis
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Hi Gus
Thanks for the comments
Travis
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I really like this one cousin. Have always loved songs about the summer for some reason. I've got to say this is one of the better ones I've seen. More great imagery, a strong chorus, and great bridge!
David
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Cheers Cousin
Neil has got a melody sorted for it
Travis
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Good descriptive lyric, that puts you there. Nice work Travis!
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Thanks James appreciate your visit
Travis
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I checked my gmail and it's not there!
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LOL...it's now in MP3 section.
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Could do with some sun over here rain rain and more rain, cold & miserable.Roll on spring
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Travis, Your words truly capture the spirit of summer. And I like your bridge, where you indicate your woman or wife is more important than any fish you might catch.
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The bridge was Neil's Jim which I like too.Thanks for your comments
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Here is the finished product... Lazy Bones Summer Day (Cotton & Vaughan) http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=12969084Fish ain't biting that's OK I can wait Legs are dangling as I contemplate That summer sun makes me glad I’m alive rarely see a cloud to spoil my sky v Old dog snores that’s all that he does Bees by my head, fly buzz buzz Darlin's planning supper based on my big catch only thing I've managed is a poison ivy rash c Busy doing nothing on this lazy bones summer day iPod playing summer songs from yesterday. Could sure get used to these lazy river bank ways Busy doing nothing on this lazy bones summer day v Might try up river to change my luck Hope I don’t snag a diving duck When my butt’s too sore for me to sit I’ll jump right in take a skinny dip. b I may not hook a good one Of any bragging size But I’ll be going home to The best catch of my life c Busy doing nothing on this lazy bones summer day iPod playing summer songs from yesterday. Could sure get used to these lazy river bank ways Busy doing nothing on this lazy bones summer day Not sure what's Groovin' on a Sunday Afternoon? But sure feels good when everything’s in tune? Like Dock on the bay on lazy bones summer day Busy doing nothing on this lazy bones summer day
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