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Hello all,

This is not a Christmas song, but wanted to write and record something upbeat to start the new year off right. I certainly would appreciate any feedback you can offer. Happy holidays to you all. My favorite time of year.

MOVIN' ON
Words & Music by David S. Becker
� 2014 David S. Becker Music

https://soundcloud.com/gocartmoz/movin-on-take-2

INTRO
VERSE 1
Hey man, it's time to let it go
Forget the hate
It will destroy your soul
Now listen
Only you can choose a better path to take
No time like now
to change the bed you make

CHORUS
Hey man, it's time for Movin' On
Down the road to a brand new song
The year will end and then a new one starts
Don't let the pain destroy your heart

VERSE 2
All these years you've harbored jealousy
While time flew by
So blind you couldn't see
Now listen
There ain't no secret now to gettin' on
Just dig down deep
And slowly move along

REPEAT CHORUS
BRIDGE
I found myself just walking all alone
On a bright spring day
I was stressed, I was mad
I was foamin' just a tad
I had lost my way
So I looked to the sky
With wondrous eyes
For a way out of all of this hurt
Then a man came to me
And he said patiently
Son it's time to move on

SOLO
REPEAT CHORUS
OUTRO

Big time intro gets it started off just right.
Nice tones and recordings of the guitars tracks and the vocals and harmonies are killer.
Oh yeah, that�s one smoking solo.

Love the energy and production.

You are one talented son of a gun.

Sorry I couldn't be more helpful feedback / critique wise but it passes my ear and groove test.

Good job , nice sonic breaks.

Looking promising, Dave.
Maybe turn down that funky guitar during the verses. I think it distracts from the vocal and everything else there.

Vic

Good song with nice feel. Enjoyed it a lot.

Hi Dave,

GOOD song & GOOD words to live by, thanks.


Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Rock on man!No nits from this dot on the map.Mike

Like it all and enjoyed the bridge
especially 'foamin' just a tad'.
Moving to the positive! Cheers.

"Hey man, it's time to let it go
Forget the hate
It will destroy your soul
Now listen
Only you can choose a better path to take
No time like now
to change the bed you make"

Yep, hate is like weeds in a garden. Eventually it chokes everything out. Great lyric and production. MUCH enjoyed. it.

J&B

Nice sound and production, the intro is pretty good. Going back to what Vic mentioned, I am not 100% sure that the vocals are mixed in quite right for this tune. Nothing really wrong, but they seem a bit disconnected from the musical tracks. Maybe the lead vox just needs more energy and "desperation". I could be wrong, but I've been wrong before. it seems like a springsteen type of track -- nice lead break in there.

Dave,

A good write. Good vocals and solos.

I really like the delay guitar in the bridge.

A good energy to this.

floyd

Hey Dave,

Nice song here, good performance and a very cool pop vibe.

I think you can polish the production a bit in places such as: more crack on the snare & slightly less brightness with the HH which is now masking the snare a little. I'd keep your rhythm riffs back a little in the mix to allow your lead vox to dominate a bit more--especially in the more subtle bridge.

Really nice Dave, you're a talented composer, good lyrics too!

steady-eddie.

Hi,

This is a great song. I enjoyed it a lot.

Lee

Thanks all for the comments and suggestions. They are all greatly appreciated and very helpful.

Wonderful message with a great deal of meaning for me personally these days. Although, in my case, there was no man to tell me, just my common sense that doesn't speak up often enough. Very upbeat for us chair dancers. Well done.

Ricki