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This is meant as a kind of conversation between the singer and the voice in his head.

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Really the voice in the head should be sung by either backing singers or a duet partner. Here I have differentiated by giving the voice in the head a chorus effect and moving him to the left in the mix. Obviously, that effect would be lost if listening in mono, so probably best to use headphones.

All feedback and comments much appreciated as always.


FOOL TO LOVE HER
(Words & Music by Gavin Sinclair)

I wake up in the morning, try to go back to sleep
Just forget her - things’ll get better
Every day’s a mountain, this one’s too steep
She’s only in your head because you let her
So I make myself some coffee
Wonder what she’s doing now
Is she thinking of me?
I don’t think so somehow

I-I-I-I’m a fool to love her
Look at you, you big old fool
I know I should, but I can’t get her out of my head
Yeah, yeah, you wish you were dead
She told me I was a tool and it was over
She knows what she’s talking about
But if she came back I’d forget every word that she said

Sweater back to front, shoes on the wrong feet
Come on buddy, pull yourself together
Turn the wrong way down a one way street
Is that some kind of a lame-ass metaphor?
No, I really did it
Look here’s the ticket I got
You’ll probably say I’m an idiot
Yeah, I’ll bet you get that a lot

I-I-I-I’m a fool to love her
Yes you are, you’re not wrong there
I know I should, but I can’t get her out of my head
That’s what happens when you don’t take your meds
She told me I was a tool and it was over
She really knows what she’s talking about
But if she came back I’d forget every word that she said
Oh, for crying out loud

Who are you, whatcha doing in my head?
I’m the voice of reason
Can’t you try saying something nicer instead
Some folks there just ain’t to pleasin’
You’re a bit of a downer
What I need’s a kind word or two
That’s not why I come round here
But I’ll see what I can do

I-I-I-I’m a fool to love her
She was a fool to let you go
How was that? Thank you, that’s much better
This feels wrong, but it's your song
She told me I was a tool and it was over
She don’t know what she’s talking about
But if she came back I’d forget every word that she said
No really, there’s no chance of that

You had to go and ruin it, didn't you?

Haha That's funny I don't care who you are.
Together/metaphor - now there's a rhyme for ya.
I enjoyed this one - very entertaining.
I think the response voice should be pushed further left, and maybe do a high pass filter on it so it sounds like an old radio voice?
That would make it stand out better IMHO.
Also I know it's hard but it could stand a haircut in length for folks with a short attention span like me
But the back and forth with the voice in his head is a hoot - very creative
Paul

I really really enjoyed this song, it was so wholesome and made me really happy
Incredible job on the lyrics! I loved how the two voices interact. Well done!

Thanks so much for the feedback, Paul. I did try a kind of radio effect on the response voice and didn't like the way it sounded, but I could probably do it a little more subtly and achieve the desired effect. I'm hoping I get some other suggestions from folks here before I get to work on that.
Regarding the length, at just under 4 minutes, it's not super long, but I do prefer to keep it closer to 3:30 when I can. The only way I can see to trim it would be to cut verse 3 in half or replace it with a shorter bridge. That would save about 18 seconds, but I think it would lose something lyrically. My hope is that the sing-along chorus makes it feel shorter than it is

Hi Gavin,
I really like the lyric and how you perform this song. I haven`t heard a song arranged like this for some time, it was a treat to listen. Lane

Thank you DeMoni and Lane. I'm glad you enjoyed the song. It was fun to write and record - one of those rare songs that kind of writes itself once you get into it

Gavin,

First off, it’s a terrific write . . . some killer lines from first to last. I think you’ve gotten some good feedback regarding the feedback voice. It’s not distinctive enough on this go-sround. My instinct is to go with a more “radio tube” type sound. Easier said than done . . . but I love the tune—just needs that clear differentiation to put it over the top.

Lot to like about this one!

Regards,

Deej

Thanks Deej, glad you enjoyed it. The general consensus seems to be that I should make it easier to distinguish between the two voices. I'd appreciate any suggestions from folks here as to how best to do that. I have some ideas myself, but would appreciate input from others.

My approach to this has evolved. Originally, it was to be a musical conversation between lead singer and back-up singers (I still think that would be fun if it was ever done live) or with a duet partner. Then I started to think it might be better if the voice in the head was recognizably the same person as the lead singer, giving rise to the challenge of how to do this while allowing the listener to know which is which. To some extent this can be done by moving the voice in the head to the left in the mix, but obviously this would not be much good if anyone was listening on a mono device, and feedback here would seem to suggest that it's not enough, even with extra chorus type effects thrown in. So...any suggestions welcome!

Hi Kevin.
You could try speaking the responses rather than singing them with a tad of reverb maybe.
Should go down well in the pub.

Vic

Loved listening to it..made me smile too.. Great work..

glyn

Thanks Vic. I already have quite a bit of reverb in there. I'll keep working on it. Not sure why this would go down well in the pub, except that, come to think of it, everything goes down well in the pub

I can only imagine how well this would work in a pub... almost anywhere. As others have said, Gavin... very creative. Best of luck with it, my friend. Enjoyed my listen.

----Dave

Hi Dave. Sorry to take so long to respond to your comment. Thanks for listening and commenting. Why does everyone think my songs belong in pubs LOL? Not that I object - I make no pretense of being highbrow

Funny song, man, and very entertaining.
Loved the back and forth.......
-Tom

very entertaining song it is creative too. Glad I had the chance to hear it. Thanks for sharing.

@Irwin

Gavin,

Very clever--I get the dual vox is cool, but would be funnier if voices were different. I posted a song here a few years ago that was a duet and sang the girl's part--got teased a bit, but finally did replace the girl's part with a gal! That's a good question though to have them background or just up front guys like the Smother's Bro--You could have fun experimenting! However, very entertaining!

steady-eddie

Thanks Eddie. Yes, I'm still trying to figure out whether to do it as a duet with both voices given equal prominence, or have the voice in the head as backing vocals. I'm inclining towards the latter solution. To be honest, my technical limitations are rather holding me back.
I'd like to hear that duet of yours


Thanks Irwin. Glad you enjoyed it.