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Lot Long
by Gary E. Andrews - 11/10/26 11:20 AM
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I humbly write this, it's how I feel sometimes so not saying it doesnt mean I dont feel it
God gave us a brain And He wants us to use it The questions come out before we refuse it for in this machine a sum of it's parts we're dazed and confused with gray colored hearts
He gave us the barley to brew our own beer but not to enjoy it we drink it in fear we may become hooked and why would that be? sounds like givith and takith to me
God gave us a brain And He wants us to use it The questions come out before we refuse it for in this machine a sum of it's parts we're dazed and confused with gray colored hearts
He gave us the hormones to lust for the flesh we could get arrested because of this mess And then while in prison it's our debt to pay seems there coulda been a different way
God gave us a brain And He wants us to use it The questions come out before we refuse it for in this machine a sum of it's parts we're dazed and confused with gray colored hearts
God, you've never known struggle you're not encased in skin we call it being human you just call it sin we're programmed how to act we're wired for disgrace why has thou forsaken us we're animals in space
Everything bad for you tastes so good Everything good for you feels so bad
God gave us a brain And He wants us to use it The questions come out before we refuse it for in this machine a sum of it's parts we're dazed and confused with gray colored hearts
Last edited by Fdemetrio; 06/11/21 12:56 PM.
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Definitely food for thought Dom
I like the central idea about our inherent gifts and restraints imposed on them
Not sure about starting and ending with the choruses...and having 5 of them...also might look at another "gift" and leave God out of it .ie..that V3 might be better used for something else that feels good but is made to feel so bad..
Finally...after that mamoth discussion, it might be a good idea to set thinngs aside for a bit...then come and revisit
You might decide to leave God out of it al together and place the limiting forces somewhere else?? dunno.
All in all nice to get back to music and lyrics
If writing ever becomes work I think I'm going to have to stop
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Lol thanks, i wrote ths in about three minutes, this has no chance of being recorded...lol I saw Japov write something as if that was his last comment, so i said oh yeah? heres mines
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Just a query. Why the switch to the second person in V3?
Steve
Creators of music have a responsibility to their craft. When they have finished using all the notes and words, they must pass them down to the next generation with a simple request. “Use these to create new music.”...Steven McDonald
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There's two verses, the third part is the bridge...
I think it's just basic commentary in the verses, and then a collective...WHY GOD WHY IS IT THIS WAY, sort of bridge. It does change POV there, but Ive heard about that rule so often, and i see it broken all the time.
It's not anti God in anyway, just how many of us view things on Earth.
But I wrote this in under 5 minutes, not sure where it all came from but it came out.
I wouldnt seriously work on something like this, it's not worth it to me, doesnt do anything for anybody, not even entertaining!
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There's two verses, the third part is the bridge...
I think it's just basic commentary in the verses, and then a collective...WHY GOD WHY IS IT THIS WAY, sort of bridge. It does change POV there, but Ive heard about that rule so often, and i see it broken all the time.
It's not anti God in anyway, just how many of us view things on Earth.
But I wrote this in under 5 minutes, not sure where it all came from but it came out.
I wouldnt seriously work on something like this, it's not worth it to me, doesnt do anything for anybody, not even entertaining!
When you say it's a bridge, it now makes sense. Don't sell yourself short on what you have written. You bring up some good thoughts, Steve
Creators of music have a responsibility to their craft. When they have finished using all the notes and words, they must pass them down to the next generation with a simple request. “Use these to create new music.”...Steven McDonald
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Thanks I usually know very shortly in if Its something I wanna record/write to. I have more throw aways than keepers.
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