JPF Home Page Forums General Messages Songwriter Message Forum You asked for it: Challenge #3

OK, here is Challenge #3.

The only parameters are that it emphasizes rain but you can't say the word rain.

Any genre, humorous, serious etc. Just don't say the word RAIN. Don't say it lower case either.

Good luck!

PS. Your assignment is due next Sunday evening by 7 PM.

Eureka:

This woman is a genius. What a challenge. Now for some real fun.
Quiet Dear, I'm having a song!

...and the deadline is???

Thanks, Jean. I needed that.

All my best.

Dave Rice

Hi Jean,

Looks like I'm the first one to step in the puddle. Here's a verse verse bridge verse song.

Unititled Song Challenge #3
(c)2007 Lynn Orloff


I hear it on my roof top,
I only wish it would stop,
It's leaking from my attic to first floor.
It doesn't make me happy,
I guess an angel's sappy,
But I just cannot take it anymore.

I know it's only H20,
That never seems to stop it's flow,
But sadly I don't carry flood insurance.
The towels are soaked from sopping,
There's just no sign of stopping,
I'm running out of hope and sheer endurance.

Bridge:
I don't think a bucket will quite be enough,
A row boat is more what I need,
Can someone tell God to turn off the spigot,
And tell Him I said pretty please.

Water, water, go away,
I have too many bills to pay,
My bank account is zeroed out again,
I wish the clouds would disappear,
That gray skies might begin to clear,
I miss ole' Mr. Sunshine, my lost friend.

Your assignment is due next Sunday evening by 7 PM. Wow, fast work, Lynn. Very cute! (Maybe this is too easy/)

okey this is cool. Ill post mine ASAP.

Lynman

So here mine, Sorry to change your name Jean to Jane coz it doenst rhyme with rain. I dont know if Anneheim rhymes with Maine.

Rain
Copyright 2007
Lynman Bacolor

Theres a new campaign
To work our brain
You can't complain
But still humane

A song ala Twain
You can write some refrain
But you must abstain
To use this word, You know it.

REfrain
They run on a drain or in a plain
You can see it in your window pane

Chorus
Its what the kids love on a hot sunny day
Its what the folks hate on rush hour monday
Turns the road slippery
Make the trees healthy

Here it is Jane
Aint you from Maine?
This is how we train
writing some quatrain

I go get my champaigne
And toss to this game
Though Im in chain
I never use it, YOu know it

Ok...this is the first challenge I've taken...so here goes.

Let it Fall
© Bree Griffith
April 16, 2007

V1

When the dark sky falls down
I’m washed beneath its curse
How many times must I drown
Before I’m finished with the hurt

I thought I had forgotten
But it all came rushing in
When the rolling sound of thunder
Reminded me again

Chorus

So let it fall
let it fall from the skies
let it wash away the pain
like the tears from my eyes
I won’t melt
I won’t let it break me down
I’ve got one last tear to shed
Before I turn this pain around
So let it fall

V2

Blue skies gave way to gray
As you looked at me that night
More than your lips could ever say
I saw there in your eyes

I swore we’d last forever
But storms of life rushed in
Now that sudden change of weather
Reminds me once again

Chorus

So let it fall
let it fall from the skies
wash away the pain & doubt
like these tears from my eyes
Let it fall
‘cause I won’t let it break me down
I’ve got one last tear to shed
Before I turn this pain around
So let it fall

Bridge

I could close my eyes and still feel
Your touch against my skin
Your breath against my lips
But it’s time I move on,
Time to just be strong

half chorus?

So let it fall
Let the clouds cry out your name
Let the drops fall like my tears
Til no memories remain
Let it fall

Hi Jean and fellow writers:

It goes against my alligator grain to post a lyric on line but, since this one will never make the charts, here goes. (The music is a childrens' disco march... if you can let your imaginations run rampant.)

ARMADILLOS ON PARADE
Copyright David L. Rice
and Bowstring Music Publishing
April 16, 2007 - All Rights Reserved


It's comin' down in buckets... just spoiling our parade...
and a thousand Armadillos... will not be getting paid.

We're sick of liquid sunshine... now it's much too deep to wade..
so we're 'gonna swim to Austin... and buy some lemonade.

Bridge:

But later in the summer... we'll wish it would come back
so that gentle pitter-patter... will wash our little shack.
Still nothin' seems to matter... now the sky is turning black
and kayaks on the Brazos... have washed up in a stack.

Chorus:

In time the cactus blossoms... will dry out in the sun...
then happy Armadillos... won't even try to run...
from water-logged Coyote's... out lookin' for some food...
and I'll be in the laundromat... to dry my attitude!

Instrumental Break and Lift:

It's still comin' down in buckets... and spoiling our parade.
The weatherman is hiding... 'cause his forecast's a charade.
We're sick of liquid sunshine... now it's much to deep to wade
so we're 'gonna swim to Austin... and buy some lemonade.

Repeat Chorus:

Closing tag: Yeah, I'll be in the laundromat to dry my attitude.

Bowstring Catalog Number 0522 (Song is 3:08 in length)

(As usual, the CD is complete but I don't have anyplace to mail it... as if it mattered!)

All my Best,

Dave Rice

hello all.
i am new to JPF and i am in need of lyricits. I do write lyrics but the musical and production aspects are my strength. If anyone would like to do some collaborating please feel free to contact me at justinmrusek@gmail.com.
you all can also listen to projects I have been a part of at www.myspace.com/ryancreamer and www.myspace.com/kinseyrose.

with Ryan VS creamer i wrote the music and piano hooks.
and with Kinsey Rose I produced kentucky.

Let me know what you think by way of email.

Justin Mrusek
cincinnati, OH

To bree

Breeliant Bree.

I love it.

Do you have a melody for this?

I already have it after reading your lyrics.

Lynman

Hi Justin

& welcome to JPF. Boy, are you in for a bombardment!!! Lyricists outweight your kind 'round here by measures! Before ya know it, you'll have so many lyrics to look at ya won't know which way to turn...lol. My suggestion is...read around & see whose lyrics you connect with, whose style you like & then contact them. I for one am always open to someone seeing what they can do with my lyrics if you "relate" to them. Because anyone who has been here a while...knows I can't play anything...just sing what's in my head.

So...welcome to JPF. Hope ya stick around...


and Lynman....

let's hear what you've got! I'm still tryin' to resing the last one ya sent me. Just haven't had the chance yet...but I'll get to it soon. Promise!

God bless!!!

Bree

These are really neat. Keep 'em coming!

Not that I have anything to offer in the way of a song but just some mud to confuse the issue

So we could not use rain.... but what about rains, rainy, rainmaker, rained, raining, etc? Now before you say No because they have rain in them... train, brain, refrain, etc also have rain in them.... so is it use of "rain" or rain refering to rain and if so does that also exclude the foreign equivilents, and the theasuras ones like precipitation, downpour, shower, storm, wetting etc.... Just a thought

Cheers

Gawrsh, Mz Jeanne..what a Fun Challenge and JUST when I had a Half Hour t'Kill, too! Herewegoooo...

"WET" (C) 2007 by Yers Truly...

As I Look Back on My Fun-Filled Life
I Remember the Mayhem and Slips
I Remember the Aprils & Mays I Survived
I Remember The Spills & The Drips:

I Used to Be Shy and I Used to Hang-Back
'Was the Last-One-You'd-Pick for a Team
"Ask a Gal for A Date" was a Sure-Heart-Attack
'Til One Day I Crossed Over that Stream...(And I Got..)

(CHORUS)
WET
As Sure as There's Thunder
I Got WET
From My Head-to-My-Toes..
I Got WET
Like a Toilet-Bowl Plunger
I Got WET
Because That's How Life Goes!

Yeah, My Love-Life was Plugged-Up Becuzza The Fear
"What WOULD They Find WRONG With Me?"
There Were Plenty of Zits when I Looked in The Mirror
Rode a SCHWINN insteada Chevy...

But One Overcast Day when the Bus Dropped Us Off
(&) Us Kids Tiptoed Past Streams-n'-Pools
I Held an Umbrella & Sue Grabbed My Arm
As I Walked My First Gal Home-from-School (And I Got)

(DOUBLE CHORUS)
WET
As Sure as There's Thunder
I Got WET
From My Head-to-My-Toes
I Got WET
From That Spell I Was Under
I Got WET
When Sue Kissed My Nose...

I Got WET
While I Held That Umbrella
I Got WET
Watchin' Rainbows Collide
I Got WET
As We Both Reached her Doorstep
I Got WET
(But..I Sure Didn't MIND!--)

(C) 2007 by Stan Good, BMI
All Rights Reserved.

How cute, Stan!


Noel, no word derived from the word rain. Brain is fine. Synonyms are fine. Foreign language? No foreign language word meaning rain either.

hey Bree.
thanks for the welcome. I looked at some of your lyrics. I like what i see. you seem to be the type that is just gifted with words. I lack in that area to say the least. haha. let me know if you want to work on anything at all. check out the new tune I posted at myspace.com/jmmcproductions.
I need to have it mastered and i will be mixing it again once i get back into town after the weekend. Let me know what you think. talk to you soon and take care!!!!
Justin Mrusek
Cincinnati, OH

Any more songs? You guys are showing a lot of imagination. Good job!

Okay, here is mine:

Please Don't Stay Away
©2007 J. M. Richardson (Bullock)


I guess you listened
when I told you go away.
Don't you remember that I also said,
"Come again, some day."
It wasn't that I didn't want you
but sometimes you were too much,
came on so strong that I'd forgotten
you could have a gentle touch.

Night after night,
day after day,
I'm longing for you.
Please don't stay away.

The world's so different
since you've gone - not quite the same.
I've looked everywhere for you,
calling out your name.
To know that I can't live without you
was a lesson hard to learn
but one I'll promise to remember
if you'd forgive me and return.

Night after night,
day after day,
I'm longing for you.
Please don't stay away.

Jean

Who is that guy in your song? I think his name is Rain.

I like it.

Lynman

"Reign-maker"

I got a talent
I like to share
40 foot of leather
can take me there
Comb em up nice and
feed em grain
enough horsepower
to pull a train

Awww Yeah....

No need for saddles
They're not to ride
Have ya ever seen a horse
with too much pride?
If a man tried to pull it
he'd be insane
That's why I sit up here
and hold the reigns

I'm the Reign-maker!
I got enough
leather to satisfy
all your needs
Put a bit in it's mouth
So you can
take the lead
Just don't forget
to fill the bag
with feed.

I'm the Reign-maker!
I can ride all night
into the morning sun
with a dozen horses pulling
just for fun
Your body will ache
before the trip is done

Now that's a pain

Here, take the reigns...


Dave

Hi Guys and Gals:

Justin, forgive my lack of manners. Welcome to JPF. Bree is right. You should expect your E-mail box to fill up quickly. I hope you will continue to post and share ideas and experience with all the nice folks here at JPF.

Tampa Stan, cute song.

Jean B., pretty strong stuff. If you had a choice, who would you pick to do the vocal? Nice job!

What a group.

All my best,

Dave Rice

Thanks, Dave R. Anyone who could sing well and mean it could sing it.
Reign-maker. Hmmm, sounds like rain but isn't. Very imaginative, Dave G!

Lynn, Lynman, Bree, Stan, Dave R and Dave G! Thanks so much for participating. I am amazed at the creativity you all showed. Great job! It's been fun reading your contributions!

Jean

I read the blog by Brian and hes planning to promote your songwriting game challenge to all of us here in JPF.

Congrats!!!

This will be a difficult job for you because you will going to think and create a weekly topic for us to stimulate our gray matter.
Just make it easy for all of us, LOL

Lynman

Well, I didn't get anything in for the current challenge--I got kinda sidetracked. I ended up writing a blues about a pair of star-crossed bullfrogs instead ("The Frog Next Door"). But hey, the frogs wouldn't have showed up without the rain. So thanks.

Joe

I know I missed the deadline. Sorry, Jean! I'm still working on this one, but here's a rough version:

(I probably need to replace some of the "she said"s in here with something stronger ... )


A Shower of Love
By Mary Lou Sudkamp, BMI

V1
She came in drippin’ wet
Splashing puddles on the floor
I asked if I could help her
She said “not anymore”
She sat down on a bar stool
Then a smile came to her face
She started laughing suddenly
Then said "I’m soaked with God’s Grace!" …

Lift: She said …
Chorus
There’s a Shower of Love pouring from the sky
It helped me dry these tears from my eyes
Was feeling pretty low
Until the heavens overflowed
Made me see that life goes on …
… life goes on … anyway

V2
She said she made mistakes
Life left her feelin’ drained
Asked God for a sign
He would heal her pain
She laughed and said “God heard me
Prayed “Please wash away my sins”
‘Cause he just showered me with love
And I’m soaked to the skin!”

Lift: with His…
Chorus
Shower of love pouring from the sky
It helped me dry those tears from my eyes
Was feeling pretty low
Until the heavens overflowed
Made me see that life goes on …
… life goes on … anyway

Bridge
She said, “thanks for lendin’ an ear”
Then over-paided for her beer
Said I’m headin’ back out so I can feel …

Chorus
The shower of love pouring from the sky
It helped me dry those tears from my eyes
Was feeling pretty low
Until the heavens overflowed
Made me see that life goes on …
… life goes on … anyway
And God showers me with love even on sunny days!

Well, a day late and a dollar short...

I just saw this post today and thought what the heck. It certainly deserves my attention. I'll post the Audio tomorrow evening.... 04/28.

I put this together this afternoon.
***********************************

Love Is A Downpour

This is a first recording.....a first everything.....

***

Love Is A Downpour
Chapman Jones 04-27-07
Standard Tuning - Simple is as simple does.
G/D/C - Bb/C/G - F/C/G
******************

[V1]
Soggy drops of water
Streaming down from the sky
Like a river otter
We're wet up to our eyes

[V2]
Splashing in the puddles
Drenched to the bone
Lets get warm and cuddle
Pretend were ducks at home

[Chorus]
Love is a downpour
Love is a mist
Love is a drizzle
Love is a kiss

[V3]
On the roof it's dripping
And splatters on to the sill
Into sleep we're slipping
While the buckets fill

[Chorus]
Love is a downpour
Love is a mist
Love is a drizzle
Love is a kiss

[Rickenbacker Break]

[V4]
Love is precipitation
Sometimes you're in a fog
Sometimes it all makes sense
Sometimes it's the hair of the dog

[Chorus]
Love is a downpour
Love is a mist
Love is a summer storm
Love is a kiss


**
Chap
And it will probably change 'twixt now and then

Dave,
thanks for the welcome. I appreciate the friendliness (if thats a word and the spelling is correct) of JPF. thanks to all who have sent me lyrics and anyone else interested please let me know at justinmrusek@gmail.com

Justin Mrusek
Cincinnati, OH
www.myspace.com/jmmcproductions

Hi Chapman:

Nice tune. Subtle lyrics. Great combination. Can't wait to hear it.

Justin:

You're more than welcome. Keep those posts coming.

All my best,

Dave rice

Chapman

Welcome to this game. I love your penned songs, very simple. I remember the acronynm KISS means "always keep it simple superman".

Lynman

Y'all write lyrics on demand so well....... Great Motivational
Tool....JeanB.....A++++++++ on creativity and board building
idea....!!!!

Hugs...
and (Much Belated) Happy Birthday....
kk