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Angel Without Wings
© words by C. Stewart ( Jan 23, 2008 )

Something happens in my mind
Soon as she walks in
Wonder if she notices
All I do is grin

CHORUS....
She's an angel without wings
But I bet we could fly
She's an angel without wings
One kiss and I'm high

Somethings floating through the room
Hey I think it's me
I can't take my eyes off her
I love what I see

CHORUS....
She's an angel without wings
But I bet we could fly
She's an angel without wings
One kiss and I'm high

Sometimes I just sit and stare
I don't mean no harm
In my lovely daydream there's
No need for alarm

CHORUS....
She's an angel without wings
But I bet we could fly
She's an angel without wings
One kiss and I'm high

Bridge....
Reality appears when
She smiles at him
Colors dissappear and
My daydream gets dim

CHORUS....
She's an angel without wings
But I bet we could fly
She's an angel without wings
One kiss and I'm high

I often wish I could write in this sort of whimsical way that seems to come naturally to you. I was pullin' for him to hook up with her 'til you busted my bubble in the bridge...ha...MJ

"KUDOS" Neighbor...this is that "Moment of Love-Recognition" kinda Song that sells Millions. (Even tho the "Touch of Reality" in da Bridge does kinda dampen Enthusiasm a wee-bit.)

BUT...endin' with that Nifty Chorus DOES keep the "Hope Level" high & Happy at the endin'. Really Good Stuff here!

Good Luck with it, Amigo!

Big Guy-Hug,
Stan

CALVIN,
GREAT TURN in the bridge! It hits hard! Oh the beauty of simplicity.

well done,
John

Hi Calvin,

You don't need music to hear this one. Well done. All songs don't have to end up with all our wishes fulfilled. Keep writing...

Hi Moker,

Glad you could drop in for the read.
Considering your talent, I'm flattered by your comments.
Thanks a bunch man, you're too kind.

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Calvin,

Ahhhhh.......you carefully bring us along so sweetly and then oh, so sorrowful...

Even so, I like the bridge:

Reality appears when
She smiles at him
Colors dissappear and
My daydream gets dim

Nice work!

Kristi

Hello Good Neighbor Stan,

Thanks for the big thumbs up, very much appreciated.
Hope you have a cool-daddy weekend.

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

great signal for the exhuberance he's feeling Cal

Somethings floating through the room
Hey I think it's me


and dya think this may have one too many verses b4 the bridge...maybe two bridges or some sort of change up???????


Ciao

Hello John Hoffman,

Thanks for a minute or 2 of your time.
I always appreciate your thoughts & or suggestions.
Looking forward to hearing some sort of music behind this one.
Have a good day.

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Hey Calvin

I'm right there with John Hoffman; really can hear this one playing. I really like the way you handled the bridge. Sometimes life isn't all fairy tales and fantasy (most times it isn't). Bringing us back to reality in such a smooth way really gives this one heart. It makes me wanna cheer for the guy too, cause even though his heart sinks in the bridge he's right back in it as the chorus begins. It takes talent to move people through different moods without loosing the original mood; a skill you seem to have mastered quite well. Well done friend!
Derek

Hello John Selleck,

I appreciate your time spent reading & commenting.
Thank you, glad ya liked it.

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Hi Kristi,

Thank you very much, that's a nice thing to say !

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

I dunno, Calvin...

Four, five, sometimes even SEVEN words in a line? :o What has happened to Sir Calvin of the Few Words?

Of course, I jest, this is awesome. The Angel Without Wings is such a lovely image, and at the same time, it seems so obvious; is it possible it hasn't been used before? But either way, leave it to you to make this song work. You grab us right from the get-go....take us up in the air with him -- then pull the rug out from under us! I do like Stan's interpretation of giving us a tease for "hope" with that last chorus....

Finally, I'm also impressed by how genuine the tone is. Given the virtually-universal theme, it would have been very easy to slip into corniness and platitudes.

So keep at it, Mr. Non-Cookie-Cutter Song-Writer!!
Beth

Hi Big John,

You know I always appreciate your visit & your comments.
glad to see you liked this...

Somethings floating through the room
Hey I think it's me


As for your question....
It worked for me.

We'll see !

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Hi Calvin,

I haven't been around much lately, but for good reasons. Son is doing well, and I've just been busy with other things and work.

This is a great hook and lyric as always. The only thing that stuck out for me is that the first verse didn't really lead well into the chorus. What makes her an angel? I wonder if you started the first verse with:

"It's like heaven in my mind"
and kept the rest of it. Then to me, the "angel" part
would work better. It does flow so nicely and even though
I can't write a note of music, I can almost "hear" it!!!

Nice to see you again.

Diane

Hi Derek,

Thank you for the visit & the kind words.
Glad ya liked it, I try !

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Hi Calvin

What a sweet sweet song.....I read the lyric and loved it, had a little nit, but now that I hear it, I'm gonna keep it to myself HA

I like what you do with the melody in the chorus lots. Very nice one. jm

Hi Beth,

Thank you for taking a moment from your action packed day to visit this tune.
I do appreciate that & I appreciate the fresh humor you deliver to the board.
You're quite the character, & I mean that in a good way.
Yes I assume the title has been done, I also seen that a group is called that !
Didn't know either till after writing this one.
Now look how you got me rambling with all these words, just like so many on em' in this song.

"it would have been very easy to slip into horniness" ........I'm certainly not above that
oh !, you said corniness, well....that too.


Either way thanks for your kind words and the chuckles you have given us all with your posts.
Have a cool day.

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Aw shucks, Calvin.

Thanks for being so sweet. But at the same time, be careful: should this brazen praise continue, my head will swell further, my equilibrium will be thrown off, and I'm likely to fall down and hurt myself again. And how am I expected to walk all the fashion runways with crutches? (note one of my original ensembles to the left, from my "Casually Hiding From the Authorities" line. VERY easy to wear...)

Cheers!
Beth

Hi Diane,

Real nice to see ya drop in her and say hello.
Your cool suggestions will be considered.
I'm glad to hear your son is well.Very good news !
I hope the piano is treating you well.
Have a good day.

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Hello Joice,

Glad you stopped in
To check this out
If ya get bored
Give me a shout.

Calvin

Hi Beth,

Well I certainly wouldn't want to see you hurt yourself...maybe I could just turn my head...just kidding !
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Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

As I walked down the fashion runways with crutches
I didn't exactly impress all the judges
My ensemble was very far from revealing
My bones were in the process of healing

(note one of my original ensembles to the left, from my "Casually Hiding From the Authorities" line. VERY easy to wear...)

Yes, Calvin, you are a hoot.

As I said, I appreciate you taking not only the time to doctor up this little verse, but also to be true to my verbose style.

What will I possibly write/talk about when I get healthy????

I can't WAIT to find out!! (though not holding my breath any time soon).

Thanks again,
Beth

P.S. Listening to Lucinda right now...she really is way cool! Appreciate the introduction!