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by Gary E. Andrews - 07/24/26 08:58 PM
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Hi...to my friends here at JPF...the very
best to you in the New Year......and thanks
for the help you've given me....
this is a preschool...hope someone's up
to lookin at such HEAVY lyrics.....
I'm tryin to gather up kids stuff and
do something with them....so I'd appreciate
a serious look at this. thanks.....
Kaley
Reflection
Kaley Willow
c2001
Little Gerty Goosey
waddles to the pond
Sees her own reflection
Turns her head it's gone.
Dapper Daniel Ducky
waddles over too..
Sees his own reflection
Says, How do you do.
Reflection..Reflection
A picture in the pond
Reflection..Reflection
Turn your head, it's gone.
Reflection..Reflection
Who is it that I see?
Reflection..Reflection
Oh my, I think it's me.
Along came Frances Froggy
hopping merrily
sees her own reflection
green as it could be
Busy Billy Beaver
backstroking by with ease
sees his own reflection
says..I think that's me!
Reflection..Reflection
A picture in the pond
Reflection ..Reflection
Turn your head, it's gone
Reflection..Reflection
Who is it that I see?
Reflection..Reflection
Oh My..I think it's me
Oh My..I think it's me
Oh My..I think it's me
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Hi Kaley....just as cute as can be. I think you have a real knack for children's songs. Just a couple of things I might change for "flow"....which we both know I am no expert on....I'd say "Dapper Danny Ducky" and "Franny Froggy"
or "Fannie Froggie"....but that's JMO...for what it's worth.
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Hi Kaley, I think you should be doing something serious with your cute kids songs, you do them so well. What about a CD for use in pre-schools etc.? Anyway, keep writing them, they're great. Happy writing in 2001.
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Hi Sunny and Judy....Thanks for checkin this out....and I'll take a look at what you're sayin Sunny...... I'm trying to put 3 or 4 of them together... to do something with this year...so you'll be seeing more of them.and..because there's not a lot of "deepness" there....I know there not the most exciting thing to critique.......so thanks bunches for looking. ![[Linked Image]](http://www.justplainfolks.org/ubb/smile.gif)
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And I see katie and jessica and christopher, and I see candace and....
fun stuff!
John
If writing ever becomes work I think I'm going to have to stop
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thanks for taking the time to look...John....
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this is such a great ditty. would this line fit in better, in the chorus?:
"splash the water, it's gone"
instead of
turn your head, it's gone
alysia
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Lovely song, Kaley. I thoroughly enjoy your children's songs. Just a thought, which isn't a nit-pick, honest: I wonder if you could make more of the fact that they're all actually arguing over who is portrayed in the pond? You know, taking it in turns to look and saying "it isn't you...it's me" (only in a way that fits into the song, of course). It doesn't actually need it though.
Ron.
The way to lead the people is to first find out where the people are going....then get in front.
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Hi Alysia and Ron..I was super surprised ...to see this on the board...was gonna shut this computer off and since i had not been able to access anything in two days...I said.one little peek 'for I go to sleep won't hurt me...well...I think both of your ideas are neat...but I know my brain will be working much better in the morning...so I will look at them closer in the morning. THANK YOU for pulling these up and commenting... When I am seriously ready to do somethin with my kid stuff...I think I will post it for a last look so you guys can help me with a last look... Kaley........
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very cute! I agree with Sunny that Franny should be changed to Fannie. Also, the repetition of the "Reflection..Reflection
A picture in the pond...." is a good thing. Kids love repetition in songs.
Fun song!
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Jill, Just caught this post...thanks for taking a look....and for making a suggestion on Franny or Fanny Froggy...haven't really looked at this song closely..but I will here in the very near future..when I go through the children's songs...and will probably do a repost of them... Thanks much for lookin. Kaley
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hey you and i have the same title to reflection too i am still writing mine too but when i get done i will post it for you to see too. mine is about reflection in a mirror
awesomeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee job
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I didn't join JP Folks till 2003 or 2004, so I completely missed this one. Glad someone resurrected it!!
"Grits is one of those country-boy words that is both singular and plural-like deer, elk and sheep. I think the singular is appropriate when there's a modifier that makes it clear one is talking about something specific. Like, 'Grits are good for you, but these here grits is tasty.'"~~Joe Wrabek
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Hi Penny..... Wow.. I saw the title as I was scanning the forum board...and I thought...hmmmmmm lyrics board 1...Reflection... but..kind of dismissed it thinking.....Naaaaaah..that was WAY back...... So I was totally surprised to see this.... I think it's been changed since I wrote it..... I do look at it and remember the chorus melody....but wonder if I took it any farther..... Thank you for taking an interest in my writing.... I had been writing 2 months at the time of this posting....I'm almost scared to look at the other ones I'm seeing pulled up  ... No..just teasing you a bit...THANK YOU very much for your interest and thoughts..... best... Kaley  Piano Melodies and Demos http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=8404&content=musicChildren's Songs http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=6469&content=musicWyman and Kaley's Andy & Friends CD http://cdbaby.com/cd/kwwg
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hey kaley you and i think alike too about rainbows amazing.
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