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by Gary E. Andrews - 07/24/26 08:58 PM
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I woke up last night with this melody stuck in my head, so this morning I put some words to it ... it needs work for sure. Thank you my friends (I am no singer, I try) http://soundclick.com/share?songid=9054362Lights on the Sea by Dan O'Connell I saw the lights on the sea we were dancing to music its just you and me I can see the waves, I can feel the wind Our bodies softly moving to the sound that lies within I can feel my heart, its beating like a drum In the quiet of the moment our bodies move as one I saw the lights on the sea reflections of sart light in the warm summer breeze I can hear your voice, wisper in my ear shades of darkness falling and I'm so glad were here I saw the lights on the sea Chorus Every night its the same old dream I'm taken to that place The warm sand on our feet and locked in our embrace Dancing to the music of the wind and rolling waves The star light off the ocean, refects upon her face I saw the lights on the sea Noone around us its just you and me I can feel your warmth, Your softly flowing hair your gentle hands upon me in the warm and salty air I saw the lights on the sea Chorus
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Dan..."I'm no singer but I try"....get out a here....lol....you have a very good voice...I just listened to this one on my e-mail.....I think this could be a great background song for a movie or tv show....placed right....good job my friend....Bob
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bob
my dear friend, a singer is YOU !!! I am a wanna be singer LOL
Thank you for the listen and your kindness always
Dan
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Hi Dan,
I agree with Bob, you have a very nice voice! I also like the tenderness in your lyric....you are a true romantic.
yerz, Ellen
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Thank you Ellen, and Holy Cow can you write, I was just going to post to your thread
love your songs
Dan
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You should wake up with a melody in your head more often. This is awesome. You have a fantastic voice, very easy to listen to. I'll trade you two cats and my first round pick in next year's NFL draft for your voice.
Loved this song.
Rick
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Excellent tune Dan. Really enjoyed it.
Steve
I'm the only person here who is not unique.
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Rick and Steve
Thank you for your kind comments my friends
Dan
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This is a really cool song. I'm a sailor, and I can see lights, too. Great job on the vocals. It's just a smooth, easy listening tune that captures the imagination.
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Thanks Kev and welcome back my friend
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I wonder where all these folks were hiding. The level of talent here has increased a lot over the last couple years.
This is a very pretty song. A beautiful love song. The tenderness of the lyric matches perfectly with your voice and music.
I wish I could wake up with stuff like this in my head.
All I usually wake up with is feeling like half the Russian army just marched through my mouth with muddy boots.
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Hey thanks Bill - well you are one fine writer , just listening to your new song ... wow ... thank you for the kind words and your listen my friend
Dan
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That my friend is a beautiful tune.
Have fun,
John
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Thank you my friend for your kind visit
Dan
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Hi Dan, love this, heard it first thing this morning and what a pleasure....so calm, great voice for this...love the sea, love light houses, etc..I live here at the lake and you can see the power plant across the lake and the lights shimmering across the water at night...love it...glyn
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Thank you my dear friend , you folks made me smile
Dan
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Hi Dan, Peaceful/beautiful/very nicely done. Lot of people wish they could sing as good as you just did. Take a bow. You're quite the entertainer. Have a good weekend. Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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Thank you my brother for the listen and the kind remarks
Dan
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Hi Dan,
Sweet! Lyrics, music, vocal, very sweet. The tiniest of nits, in the chorus, you sing,
"reflects upon HER face..."
In the rest of the song, you're singing to her, not about her. I think it would have more impact to say,
"reflects upon your face..."
Just a thought.
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Really nice love song with a melancholy touch in the second verse, nicely written and a lovely folk-pop melody. Well done, you should be happy with this creation.
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Ricki
nice catch my friend, didn't pick up on that thank you my friend
Dan
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Really nice, Dan. I've spent a lot of evenings sitting on the beach and you have captured the feel really well. Yeah, too bad about your voice. Tell you what - big hearted guy that I am, I'll trade you.  Seriously - you have the perfect voice for the kind of songs that you do. Has a great soothing feel to it - nice one DanO  Scott
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Thank you Scott my friend
I appreciate the comment for sure
Dan
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Hi Dan,
I think you have a nice singing voice too! I really like the melody. Like the others, I like the rich softness of the words and music.
Really enjoyed it!
Kristi
A musician must make music, an artist must paint, a poet must write,
if he is to be ultimately at peace with himself. What a man can be,
he must be. -- Abraham Maslow, American Psychologist
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Dan I always look forward to hearing a new tune from you, I love your voice. This is a very relaxing soothing song I like it Yeah, too bad about your voice. Tell you what - big hearted guy that I am, I'll trade you. Ladies and Gentlemen Scott Campbell, not only does he write songs, seems he has busted into comedy also, lets give him a big hand....... Shooter
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Kristi and Paul
you folks always have such nice comments and always take time to listen, I thank you from the bottom of my heart my friends
Dan
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Dan...Dan...Dan...
You have one of the most beautiful yet haunting vocals on this site...don't sell yourself short.
This is very beautiful..I love the I saw the lights on the seas...that melody is so pretty..
Love this one!
Kimberly
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Thank you my dear friend
you made me smile
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Thank you my friends for your kind comments. I will close it now
Dan
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Dan,
Well done! I'll take a voice that is heart felt and truly sings with emotion any day over someone performing vocal acrobatics with no soul! I got caught up in the lyrics and melody as well. Great Job! You showed WNY good!
Tom W.
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Dan....I hate to say this to you....LOL...."I told you so"....it's offical....you have a great voice....Bob
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LOL you are just gettin older like me bro and can't hear as well as before LOL.
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Dan....I was listening to "Old Picker" today.....I love the lyrics.....it's me, that's why I like it so much...I'm getting older yeah....but my hearing is good.....lol....can't I gloat alittle....lol....re-read my post, the first one....Bob LOL you are just gettin older like me bro and can't hear as well as before LOL.
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Hi Dan
This is just Soooooooooo Pretty -- Great hook and nicely done ! jm
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I think it's a nice song and works well with the lyric.
Your singing voice is actually very pleasant. In a few places, I think it would be worth experimenting with the singing melody slightly to make the note changes more distinct. Staying within the existing chords, though, I mean. I suspect that it's your nervousness about singing that steers you away from doing that, but your voice is fine so just work on bringing out the melody that's already there.
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THANKS STEVE !! good advice, I will work on it
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Hey Dan, I really enjoyed your song and the simplicity of the recording.
It reminds me a little of "Streets of London" by Ralph McTell, a song I adore.
Nice job.
-Mike
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thanks mike :-) I will have to check out Ralph McTell. He sounds like someone I would like music wise ... I appreciate the listen my friend
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This has a really lovely melody Dan.
I don't really have any nits except I think the 2nd verse should stay 1st person. And I think you should consider repeating the 1st verse instead of the 2nd. The 1st verse seems stronger to me lyrically.
This is a really lovely song.
Peace,
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Dan...Beautiful tune..your vox is just fine..when I sing the Humane Society phones me up and asks "what the heck are we goin to do with all these dogs?"...must be a pitch thing on my part..lol..
Well Done
Larry
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Each of us has cause to think with deep gratitude of those who have lighted the flame within us" - Albert Schweitzer.
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Ian and Larry
thank you so much !!! Ian you are right on the person part. I have to re-record it. Larry, no need to sing when your piano is that beautiful my friend.
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Dan , this is good !!! I really enjoyed the listen and performance .
Keep up the good work .
All the best
Jan
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Just think of it as some place you have to enter and you need to find the key."
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