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Pass It Along ©2011 Steven M. Biederman http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=11097307It was raining at the diner Someone said it might turn to snow Late at night and miles from home I ordered coffee to go When a young girl recognized me From the poster on the door Said you're the guy who was singing at the church Then she said a whole lot more She said... I believed in Jesus long ago But He let me down so I took another road Today Jesus to me is no big deal That's the way I feel And I challenge you to prove to me he's real And I said.... I am no prophet And I cannot show you signs I'm just a guy who writes some songs To help make sense of life And they serve me as my road map To remind me where I'm going They're all about the love of Jesus And when I sing I can pass it along She said.... I used to go to church there back When I was just a kid But I did something real bad wrong And I haven't been back since I was 17 and pregnant And I had to leave my home The church and my folks disowned me So I've raised the child alone I told her.... I am no prophet And I cannot show you signs I'm just a guy who writes some songs To help make sense of life And they serve me as my road map To remind me where I'm going And they're all about the love of Jesus And when I sing I can pass it along I've got a wife and two fine kids And I travel lots of road And sometimes I can't be there So my wife takes up the load And sometimes I feel guilty But we know what God has in store She's got her job and I've got mine And that's how we serve the Lord So I got my guitar and I sang the songs I sing in all my shows I played them soft so I wouldn't draw attention But a crowd began to grow I sang of God's forgiveness Like Jesus was there you know I could have gone on forever But it was time for me to go She said,,, I know I've been a sinner In fact I've never done too much right I'm a girl with little to give I've not done much with my life But I'd like to give you something If you won't think it wrong Then she kissed me on the cheek And with moist, red eyes, she said When you get home you can pass it along
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Hey Steven, I liked the message and loved the music! I believe it would pack more punch, though, if you could prune it down to at least the 4 minute mark...and it would be great if you could introduce the title somewhere around the 1 minute mark. Other comments below, keep or sweep  It was raining when I came in the dinerAnd they Waitress said it might turn to snow
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Hi, Stevie...
This is another one of your great songs/music/lyric/vocals....just great and it always amazes me when you come up with this music for your songs...so much talent...you're wonderful....
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Hi Stevie This is beautiful, and I too loved the message. I agree with R.Shayne, you can very easily take out a lot of the "and" it will flow a lot better for your lovely voice, and will fit nicely to your music. Other than that, Well done! Hugs Michele
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Hey Steven, I liked the message and loved the music! I believe it would pack more punch, though, if you could prune it down to at least the 4 minute mark...and it would be great if you could introduce the title somewhere around the 1 minute mark. Other comments below, keep or sweep It was raining when I came in the dinerAnd they Waitress said it might turn to snow Thanks for the feedback Shayne. Good suggestions on the first two lines. Originally the female character was going to be the waitress but a waitress wouldn't be confrontational so I changed it. As for the length, I cut it down as much as I could to maintain the integrity of the story. Story songs tend to go long anyway and I'm not looking for radio play. I think it will go over well in a live performance judging from feedback I've gotten elsewhere. I was wondering if the story would sound "contrived" but so far everyone who's heard it says it isn't so that's a positive. I also changed the title from YOU CAN PASS IT ALONG To just PASS IT ALONG as the "you can pass it along" doesn't come till the last line of the song. Thanks again for the listen and suggestions, Stevie
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Di and I listening...and smiling! Glyn pretty much beat me to the punch about trimming by taking out a few of the superfulous words. But, that said, the length doesn't bother me all that much. It's just that those unneeded words slightly interrupt the flow. All in all, we like it a bunch...good job! All the best...
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STEVIE--
GREAT MESSAGE--
MY IDEAS ON THE CH: USE OR LOSE
I told her....
I am no prophet
And I cannot show you signs
I'm a BELIEVER who writes LOTS OF songs
To help make sense IN MY life
THESE GOSPEL SONGS serve as A road map
To remind me where I'm going
And they're all about the love of Jesus
I sing FOR HIM AND pass THEM along.
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hey Stevie,great song and message!You sure have me listening more to this genre of music.I've always loved the old gospel but some of these new christian songs here are hittin' on me.Thanx,Mojo
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Hi, Stevie...
This is another one of your great songs/music/lyric/vocals....just great and it always amazes me when you come up with this music for your songs...so much talent...you're wonderful....
glyn Thank you for the listen and nice comments Glyn. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Stevie
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Steven, If I were looking to play this by ear one day I think I'd need to practice those unpredictable chord patterns and timing changes for a year or two to get it down..lol.. But that is exactly what endears my to the tune and your wonderful storytellin' voice as well. The point is, you was savin' souls brother !! Extrememly unique in all the world..
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Hi Stevie, I love this kind of song, love the message. A lot of story songs are long, I mean look at “Boys of Fall” I think it’s over 8 minutes! I was following along reading the lyric while listening and when you sang about how she’s done some real bad things; I recalled something I once read in the Bible. I don’t remember where it was so if anyone knows I’d love to know, but basically it said those that are forgiven the most love the most. That always stuck with me. This is a very good song. Dottie
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Stevie,
Love the music on this, it really takes on the conversation well and represents the characters. Not sure how this could be cut down, but it didn't "seem" too long to me, but I get all caught up listening to your voice!!
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Hi Stevie This is beautiful, and I too loved the message. I agree with R.Shayne, you can very easily take out a lot of the "and" it will flow a lot better for your lovely voice, and will fit nicely to your music. Other than that, Well done! Hugs Michele Thanks Michele. I may redo the vocal on it and will keep that in mind. Stevie
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hey stevie, Loved this one.... the prodigal daughter and the father-like figure leading her home...very nice~~~MFB III
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Nice one, Stevie - I think you are taking the right approach with these songs - meaning not being preachy but relating experiences in a positive and convincing way. This one is no exception. Good story - I didn't notice the length. Only listened once so I may be wrong on this but it seemed to have a number of different musical sections. Kinda like Thunder Road. In any case, it never got stale. Sounds like someone gave Harry Chapin a lyric and he called in Roger McGuinn for help Scott
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At first I thought there was too much reverb on the lead vox, but I got used to it as it went along. But you might want to consider looking at that.
Interesting and well told story.
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Good story and its not as preachy as some of these songs can be. So, keep that guitar tuned and that voice ready and just keep passing these types of songs on...
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Gives me chills, Little Stevie. It's little long, but I had enough time to listen, because the lyrics have such a nice conversational feel to them. I felt like I was eves-dropping the whole time! Great message. Made my day!
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Great message in this one, the kind of song you can play live and keep the crowd interested. Good Job.
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Stevie..
Di and I listening...and smiling! Glyn pretty much beat me to the punch about trimming by taking out a few of the superfulous words. But, that said, the length doesn't bother me all that much. It's just that those unneeded words slightly interrupt the flow. All in all, we like it a bunch...good job! All the best...
Al & Di Thanks Al. Great to see you on the board and back in action. You've been missed. Stevie
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Hi, Stevie!! I really love this one! I love the music and the changes... that's what kept me hooked in as you sang this great story!! The story is beautiful, and so heartfelt... makes me imagine even what happens after the song ends... can't help but feel that this girl is gonna be alright! --Jen
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STEVIE--
GREAT MESSAGE--
MY IDEAS ON THE CH: USE OR LOSE
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I'm a BELIEVER who writes LOTS OF songs
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I sing FOR HIM AND pass THEM along.
Mackie Thanks for the listen and suggestions Mackie. Stevie
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hey Stevie,great song and message!You sure have me listening more to this genre of music.I've always loved the old gospel but some of these new christian songs here are hittin' on me.Thanx,Mojo Mojo, Glad you like it. Thanks for listening all the way through. Stevie
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Nice idea here Stevie and I liked the chord changes.
It could be shorter and sweeter and you might wanna check California Dreamin - as I felt there was a little bit of similarity - which could be a good thing.
Nice ending verse connection or loop back to the entry of the song, by the way.
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Steven, If I were looking to play this by ear one day I think I'd need to practice those unpredictable chord patterns and timing changes for a year or two to get it down..lol.. But that is exactly what endears my to the tune and your wonderful storytellin' voice as well. The point is, you was savin' souls brother !! Extrememly unique in all the world.. Darrell, That is the biggest and best compliment I've ever recieved. Thank you so much. You made my day. Stevie
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Hi Stevie, I love this kind of song, love the message. A lot of story songs are long, I mean look at “Boys of Fall” I think it’s over 8 minutes! I was following along reading the lyric while listening and when you sang about how she’s done some real bad things; I recalled something I once read in the Bible. I don’t remember where it was so if anyone knows I’d love to know, but basically it said those that are forgiven the most love the most. That always stuck with me. This is a very good song. Dottie Thanks Dottie. That means a lot to me. Stevie
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Stevie,
Love the music on this, it really takes on the conversation well and represents the characters. Not sure how this could be cut down, but it didn't "seem" too long to me, but I get all caught up listening to your voice!!
Tammy Thanks Tammy. Glad you liked the story. Stevie
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hey stevie, Loved this one.... the prodigal daughter and the father-like figure leading her home...very nice~~~MFB III Thank you MFB. I like your analogy. That's what I was aiming for. Stevie
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Nice guitar playin. I agree it is a well thought out story line and the singing is nicely done. i had a little trouble following the melody between the verses and chorus. It seemed like it kept changing around so i kind of got lost with the feel .. but it makes a good story. Keep up the good work.
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Nice one, Stevie - I think you are taking the right approach with these songs - meaning not being preachy but relating experiences in a positive and convincing way. This one is no exception. Good story - I didn't notice the length. Only listened once so I may be wrong on this but it seemed to have a number of different musical sections. Kinda like Thunder Road. In any case, it never got stale. Sounds like someone gave Harry Chapin a lyric and he called in Roger McGuinn for help Scott Hey Scott, I'm glad it kept your interest all the way through. I know it's a long story song but I can't think of any way to shorten it without compromising on the message as a whole. If I was to cut one part it affects another and so on. Thanks for the listen and comments. I appreciate it. Stevie
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At first I thought there was too much reverb on the lead vox, but I got used to it as it went along. But you might want to consider looking at that.
Interesting and well told story. You're right Kevin. It did have too much reverb. I put a small reverb on the vocal and then made the mistake of putting more over the master. I've gone back and corrected it. Thanks for the input. Stevie
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Good story and its not as preachy as some of these songs can be. So, keep that guitar tuned and that voice ready and just keep passing these types of songs on...
Take care,
Kyrk Thanks Kyrk. Preachy is exactly what I don't want to be. Stevie
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Harry Chapin a lyric and he called in Roger McGuinn for help EXACTLY ! you're sounding good ! Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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Gives me chills, Little Stevie. It's little long, but I had enough time to listen, because the lyrics have such a nice conversational feel to them. I felt like I was eves-dropping the whole time! Great message. Made my day!
Kevin Thank You Kevin. You made my day. Stevie
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Great message in this one, the kind of song you can play live and keep the crowd interested. Good Job.
Rob Thanks Rob. I'm glad you said that because it was designed to be played live. Stevie
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Hi, Stevie!! I really love this one! I love the music and the changes... that's what kept me hooked in as you sang this great story!! The story is beautiful, and so heartfelt... makes me imagine even what happens after the song ends... can't help but feel that this girl is gonna be alright! --Jen Thanks Jen. I'm glad it had that effect on you. Can't wait to play it live. Stevie
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Nice idea here Stevie and I liked the chord changes.
It could be shorter and sweeter and you might wanna check California Dreamin - as I felt there was a little bit of similarity - which could be a good thing.
Nice ending verse connection or loop back to the entry of the song, by the way.
Doug Thanks Doug. Not sure what you mean about a connection to California Dreamin'. Stevie
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Nice guitar playin. I agree it is a well thought out story line and the singing is nicely done. i had a little trouble following the melody between the verses and chorus. It seemed like it kept changing around so i kind of got lost with the feel .. but it makes a good story. Keep up the good work.
g Thanks a bunch "g". Stevie
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Thanks for the listen and feedback Calvin. Stevie
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Excellent storytelling Stevie.
Love the guitar work and the vocals.
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