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Leafs
by Gary E. Andrews - 05/01/24 01:05 PM
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Hey Jane,
Nice work here, I can really hear the essence of the song coming out in your vocals.
If there is room for improvement, I would look at the vocal phrasing, which in some places can sound a little rushed. The melody line is solid, but may need some variation in regard to using a lower or higher harmonic in places just to make it bite a little more.
Other than that, a solid write.
cheers, niteshift
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