Dave,

This sounds real good. I really like the bass. I like the mellow guitar answers, but think it's a bit too mellow for the song style. I would use a little different tone effect--but all of us have preferences with tones, so it's not like one is wrong or right I guess. I like a more basic clear tone for pop,(and this song) heavier and more distortion for rock, and mellow for jazz or blues. The performance is certainly very good!

I also love the lyrics with this song and think the audience will enjoy and relate to the message. I remember this song the first time around--nice write!

(Edit) I just wanted to say that I applaud songwriter's that experiment with different sounds or arrangements at times that might go against "convention," as we the listener's sometimes get "conditioned" to what we think sounds best. As songwriting artists, one of the coolest things is the fact that we all approach the art in our own way! How many times did the "Beatles" come out with a new album with sounds, arrangements that became "new trends?" Just wanted to make that statement, to bring attention that my thoughts or take on a song undoubtedly have been influenced by convention and bias.

steady-eddie.

Last edited by E Swartz; 06/13/13 05:17 PM.