What you really, have here is some lovely ideas that aren't joined to make a cohesive statement. It's very difficult to grab someone's attention at the start of a song so it doesn't sound like a million others. (something to think about)
The chorus doesn't relate to the verse or at least you haven't shown how it does. This seems more like a collection of ideas, rather than a well thought out song.

There are TWO very,very, good lines:
1) I civilize my bourbon with a glass
2) I can hear it in the things you never say

Soooo...needs work, but nothing your ability can't handle; best of luck!
-Mike