Originally Posted by Ian Ferrin
This is really good Beth and Ricki,

The lyric is terribly clever and engaging and the music is pretty perfect for the lyric.

Lyric wise, I'm not in love w/ the line "Gotta get out of bed"... it's the opening and it's not exactly a zinger. It's kind of stating the obvious and I bet you could come up w/ something more interesting in a non-rhyming line.

Music wise no real nits. IMO this is ready for the full band. It's a really good song IMO.

Peace,

Ian


Hi there Ian,

A belated thank you to you too for taking the time to listen to this one and to share your feedback with us. I know you are quite meticulous in that regard, so your words mean that much more to me.

As for trying to dial up that second line, I can't entirely disagree with you. Though I think it works to set the scene, if we ever take this any further, I could certainly consider revisiting it.

Thanks again!
Beth

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