Hey, Guys,

Here is a song I wrote with personal meaning to me that I'm hoping to flesh out and create a full demo/ backing track so that I can sing it on solo gigs and share with my band so that they might learn it. I am open to any and all criticisms and suggestions. Thanks!

“Devotion” - https://soundcloud.com/maroon-corey/devotion/s-SQ6eK

(Verse 1)
I know a guy who says he wakes up with his eyes closed.
What does he see?
I hear him humming a tune, goin’ ‘bout his day.
Sometimes I hear him sing!
He mumbles when he sits down and when he gets back up again.
First chance he gets, he opens up his book again.
You might hear him speak a kind word to a friend.
Or you might hear him treat a foe just like his kin.
Is he livin’ right? Seems to be.
Always got some friends he wants to see.
Can’t account for where he seems to be.

(Chorus)
Devotion; What is it?
Is it showing that you need something you can never be?
Devotion, What do you get down on your knees to do?
Do you choose it or does it choose you?

(Verse 2)
I know a guy who sometimes holds his eyes closed.
What does he see?
He might not tell you what you want to hear,
but what he says, you can believe it!
Now, when other race on, he might step back.
And when they won’t go, he might move ahead.
Other folks might wax and wane just like the moon,
but you best believe he’ll do what he said he’d do.
Is he livin’ right? Seems to be.
Always got some friends that want to see him.
Can’t account for where he seems to be.

(Chorus)

(Bridge/ Coda)
He’s gonna struggle just like the rest of us.
He’ll be the first to tell you that he ain’t the best of us.
But he says in stillness, comfort comes to us!
He’s just like you and me.
Never gonna be the best we can be.
That’s why I need to get down on my knees!